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Previous Challenge Entry (EDITOR'S CHOICE)
Topic: Winter (the season) (08/13/09)

TITLE: Old Man Winter
By Verna Cole Mitchell
08/18/09
~10th Place


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When Old Man Winter whistles in
Through autumnís bare-limbed trees,
He paints the blue sky gray again
And instigates a freeze.

He pounds the earth with shards of ice
And stencils in sharp sleet.
With freezing rain he forms a glaze
On every road and street.

He rules the world with gusty winds;
No balmy breezes blow,
For he controls the atmosphere
With crystal tears and snow.

He toils to hide the warmth of sun
And brings night-dark to day.
His chill drives birds to leave their homes
And seek warmth far away.

When people dare to venture out,
Of comfort he disposes.
From palette in his stiff back pack,
He reddens cheeks and noses.

He sends a shiver to their bones,
Then numbs their hands and feet,
And doesnít stop his torment till
Their miseryís complete

He withers flowers that have dared
To last beyond the fall
With squalls and blizzards heís devised
To decimate them all.

Iím wise to Old Man Winterís plans,
His vengeful aspirations.
I will not let him bother me
With frigid machinations.

He cannot keep from me the glow
Of lamp and fireside,
Nor darken light where in my heart
My Dear Lord does abide.

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Loren T. Lowery08/20/09
Clever and creative and the last two stanzas were to me, allegorical to life/living itself.
Mary Lou Tiner08/20/09
Very nice done. Great imagery, meter, rhythm and creative rhyme. A pleasure to read.
Mariane Holbrook08/20/09
Oh, I love this:

"From palette in his stiff back pack,
He reddens cheeks and noses."

I can visualize Old Man Winter searching for the perfect red for little boys' cheeks and noses. I always loved kissing my young sons' cheeks when they came in from playing in the snow. Old Man Winter was a meticulous artist, with just the right icy blues and the silver grays and snow whites. Your poem is perfect in meter and rhyme and I wish I could see it illustrated and in a chilren's book. So beautiful in every way!!
Dee Yoder 08/20/09
This description is JUST like an Ohio winter:

He rules the world with gusty winds;
No balmy breezes blow,
For he controls the atmosphere
With crystal tears and snow.


Brrr...I can almost feel the cold now! So happy I can look out my window and warm myself back up with summer's sun. Awesome and accurate descriptions!
Mona Purvis08/20/09
Just splendid in so many ways! Perfectly done. Paints a true picture of winter.
A winner, I'm sure.

Mona
Charla Diehl 08/21/09
You painted an accurate picture of winter with your masterfully creative poem. Great descriptions, rhyme and meter.
Deborah Ann Belka08/21/09
We must live in the same place! This is a well written poem with lots of attitude and spirit. One of my favorites so far. Stay warm in His glow.
Linda Wright08/22/09
It was a pleasure to read this creative poem. Well done. Linda
Lynda Schultz 08/23/09
Marvelous work.
Jan Ackerson 08/24/09
Wonderful!

I especially like the last two stanzas: your rhyme of aspirations/machinations, and the beautiful message in the last verse.
Colin Swann08/24/09
Absolutely excellent - really enjoyed this! Thanks
Bryan Ridenour08/24/09
I'm with Marianne (see above) I love the picture of the palette! Wonderful poem and meter! Nicely done!
Carol Slider 08/24/09
Absolutely lovely imagery and a very vivid description of the tyrant that is winter... but like all tyrants, he doesn't stand a chance against the things that really matter. Beautiful!
Beth LaBuff 08/24/09
Your poetry reads so smoothly and is soÖ. PERFECT!! This is filled with wonderful, sophisticated, descriptive images. I'd be hard-pressed to pick out a favorite, or even ten. I LOVE THIS!!
Ada Nett08/24/09
It flows simply yet intricately from line to line. You are quite talented!
~Cathy~
Deborah Engle 08/26/09
Wonderful in every way. When I grow up, I want to write poetry like this!
Eliza Evans 08/27/09
I felt really shivery and cold. And I don't need that.. I'm from Canada. :)

Such a joy and blessing to read your poetry, Verna.

Congrats on your placing, dear friend!
Yvonne Blake 08/27/09
Yay, Verna! Congratulations!
Beth LaBuff 08/27/09
Verna, you've taken your poetry to a whole new level. Super congrats on your EC! (((hugs)))