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Previous Challenge Entry (EDITOR'S CHOICE)
Topic: Summer (the season) (07/09/09)

TITLE: 100°F Is For The Birds
By Patricia Herchenroether
07/14/09
~2nd Place


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The mercury is on the move,
quicksilver rising high.
As Sol heads toward his zenith post
the day looms hot and dry.

Dust devils made by sparrows
taking dry baths in the lane
hover in the windless air,
no sign of coming rain.

Heat waves arise from sticky tar
and shingles on the shed.
Except for birds the silent world
lies heavy, stagnant, dead.

But robins splash quite merrily
at birdbaths wreathed by flowers,
creating lovely rainbows
from their bright alfresco showers.

Too hot to move, the human flocks
recline with lemonade
on porch swings or in front of fans,
on hammocks in the shade.

Out in the kitchen garden patch
hop raucous, blue-black thieves.
Industrious, scarecrow disdained,
they’re bringing in the sheaves.

While people sipping icy tea
yearn for the setting sun,
hummers slurp red nectar mix
from feed ports one-by-one.

On the fencerow goldfinch dance,
late summer courtship started.
But human romance waits till night;
the heat leaves hugs half-hearted.

From choir lofts throughout the trees
come anthems without words.
The lazy days of dogs and men
don’t still the songs of birds.

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Gregory Kane07/17/09
Nicely done. Left me feeling decidedly sluggish
Debra Martinez07/19/09
I greatly enjoyed your word choices. I usually lose interest in poems before the end, but read every word of yours. Good job.
Linda Payne07/20/09
As a bird lover, I enjoyed your descriptions of your backyard "neighbors". I could feel the heat and lethargy of a hot summer day. Good job.
Catrina Bradley 07/20/09
Great wording - like "human flocks" and "choir lofts throughout the trees." Nicely done, a joy to read.
Jeanne E Webster 07/21/09
Loved your playful words and detailed summer events. Nice rhythm and bounce, even though it was hot! Blessings.
Jan Ackerson 07/22/09
Wonderful imagery--send this one to Birds and Blooms magazine!
Christina Banks 07/22/09
I like the pictures you painted. I feel hot (even in the air conditioning).
Mariane Holbrook07/22/09
This is a keeper, that's for sure! I loved the read! Big time kudos!
Sara Harricharan 07/22/09
LOL at your title. This made me chuckle. Good job!
Karlene Jacobsen 07/22/09
I think I felt steam rise from my keyboard and mouse as I read this great poem.
Shirley McClay 07/23/09
Congratulations!! Excellent job.
Carol Slider 07/23/09
This is such a rich and vivid depiction of summer. You really capture the essence of it through your marvelous imagery. Congratulations!
Lisa Johnson 07/23/09
Loved the poem...the images it evoked, the flow of the words, the wonderfl descriptions...all joined together to make it a great read.
Congrats on your win.
Chely Roach07/23/09
Ohh, I could feel the heat. Great poem! Congratulations!
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/23/09
Congratulations! I loved your poem.
Nancy Tilson07/23/09
Perfect! I loved every part of your delightful poem. You make me wish I could write poetry. Congratulations!
Lynda Schultz 07/23/09
This made me quite relaxed. Congratulations on the job well-done and well-rewarded.
Patricia Turner07/24/09
I love birds and I love your poem! Congratulations - very well done!
Charla Diehl 07/31/09
This creative entry had me yearning for iced tea. Perfect rhyme and meter, wonderful picture phrases and this held my interest from start to finish. Great job. Congratulations on your win.