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Previous Challenge Entry (EDITOR'S CHOICE)
Topic: Sibling(s) (05/01/08)

TITLE: A Gynormous Nose and Giggling Yellow Fuzz
By Laury Hubrich
~2nd Place


A face came in close. Nose squished into the window, Jason peered inside. Four off-white eggs rested safely.

Warmed to exactly 90 degrees, the little chicks baked and toasted their backsides. Jason thought he heard something. He pressed his ear up close and heard tiny chirping but also something else.

Jason lifted his head. “I hear singing, Mrs. Hawkins.”

“You hear them chirping inside their eggs.”

When the front sides cooled, the little chicks twisted and turned their tiny bodies toward the heat. Jason once again pressed his ear to the small incubator.

“Stay on the sunny side, always on the sunny side,” squeally little voices sang from inside the eggs.

“Are you sure chicks don’t sing?” Jason asked.

“I am very sure, Jason,” Mrs. Hawkins said with a smile.

Eggbert peeked out a teeny tiny hole that he had managed to peck out with his sharp beak. “Hellloooo,” he chirped to anyone listening.

“Chirp, chirp.”

“Eggman, is that you?”

A muffled voice came from the fragile shell. “Mmmmm.”

“Eggsmeralda, watcha ya doin’?”

“Argh! Tuk, beak iz tuk.”

Eggbert, being the self-proclaimed big brother, was quick to offer suggestions. He said slowly, one word at a time, “Eggsmeralda, can you hear me?”

“Vat? Am bizzy now. Vedy bizzy. Iz tuk, beak iz tuk.”

“I know that silly. Use your legs to push onto the shell and pull your head back,” this was said with the utmost patience.

Eggsmeralda drew up her legs and pushed against the wall with all her might. “Mmmwwwaaa,” little sister blew a kiss to her dear brother! “You’re the best, Eggbert!”

Giggles erupted from an egg sitting alone in the corner. A little girl chick was cracking up inside.

Jason looked over at his teacher, shrugged his shoulders, and then pressed his nose back to the window.

Eggman yelled out a warning. “Everyone hold on. Here she goes again!” Eggylou erupted into giggles and her egg started to roll back and forth. She held her tummy with her newly formed wings and laughed.

She got to laughing so hard that her egg rolled into Eggbert. Eggbert, from the force of Eggylou’s bump, slammed into Eggsmeralda. Eggsmeralda slid into Eggman and then Eggman completed the journey by crashing back into the trouble-maker, Eggylou.


“What, Eggsmeralda?” she gulped between tiny chuckles.

“I feel all scrambled inside. You are silly.”

“Am not silly. Don’t you see that gynormous nose poked against our window? Every time I see that nose, it makes me want to giggle. I can’t help myself.”

“But Eggylou, you hurt me. Will you please be a good egg? Really, you should be hard boiled, that would keep you still.”

Eggbert squealed, “Ewwww, who did it?”

“Did what?” they asked together.

“Who stinks?”

“Wasn’t me. It’s Eggman.”

“Sisters are the stinky ones,” said Eggman.

The girls piped up, in their high-pitched, girlie chirps. ”Girls are best ‘cause boys are pests!”

Eggbert whined, “Are not pests! Where’s Mom?”

“I don’t know where Mom is. I sure do miss her but towards the end, it was like we were walking on egg shells around her,” Eggman smiled.

“You are a funny guy. When Mom gets back I’m telling. I’m telling on all of you!”

“You’re a tattletale, Eggsmeralda. Go suck an egg.”

Eggsmeralda gasped. “You said a bad word,” she chirped loudly.

Jason called out to Mrs. Hawkins. “Are you sure these chicks can’t sing and talk?”

Mrs. Hawkins peeked into the window with Jason. She drew in her breath. “Why, the yolk’s on me. I do hear singing and talking.”

At that same time, Eggman used all his boy-strength to poke through his egg. The bright light made him blink. The big nose and eyes looking through the glass made him shudder. He pulled himself up and wiggled his little bottom to knock off the piece of shell.

“Hey guys,” Eggman peeped. “Hurry and come out! I sure do want to meet my brothers and sisters!”

Soon, all three made their way out of hiding and greeted Eggman with hugs and kisses.

Jason’s eyes grew big and he shouted for all to come see the hugging, kissing chickens!

Then Eggman pecked at Eggsmeralda and thumped her on the head. Eggbert’s clumsy feet tripped up Eggylou. Eggylou bumped into Eggman who thumped the wall and shook the incubator bumping Jason’s squished up nose.

All four chickies looked up and saw a big grinning face with that gigantic nose and fell into a giggling pile of yellow fuzz.

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Sara Harricharan 05/08/08
ROFL! I like Eggsmerelda the best, she is so funny and I could see her whole personality summed up in the dialouge. I especially like when she is going "not now very busy!" That made me giggle-especially at the ending that fit the title so very well! Excellent job! ^_^
Debbie Wistrom05/08/08
Creative and fun. This may be my favorite of all time.

How clever and entertaining. I hope to see a ribbon awarded to this entry.
Debi Derrick05/08/08
I love this! It is so creative, so funny and so much fun to read.
Sheri Gordon05/09/08
Eggsmeralda cracked me up. Loved her dialogue. Very creative entry. Nice job with the topic.
LauraLee Shaw05/10/08
Your title hooked me and your story kept me there. What a POV! My gynormous belly (to them anyway) is giggling up and down over this one. Very well done. ;)
Betty Castleberry05/12/08
OH MY! What a hoot. This is my favorite line:

“Eggsmeralda, watcha ya doin’?”

“Argh! Tuk, beak iz tuk.”

I just love this!!!
Joanne Sher 05/12/08
Oh, MY, GOSH! This is TOOOOOOO fun! This had to have been a light in your dark week. Absolutely fun, delightful, silly, and WONDERFUL. (oh, and as far as I'm concerned, gynormoous IS a word)

TOOOOO much fun!
Shirley McClay 05/12/08
Love this one Laury! You are so creative... love the pov of the chicks mixed with the people! The title is especially eye catching.
Jan Ackerson 05/12/08
This is my favorite so far this week, Laury! Adorable!
Dee Yoder 05/12/08
I agree with all the others, Laury! This is fun, creative, and so well written! My favorite part is the little chicks all warming their little bottoms and singing, "Stay on the sunny side..." Marvelous, Friend! You made my day.
Sharlyn Guthrie05/12/08
Very cute! I love the characterization of each chick and their interaction with the puzzled student observer. Sooo clever!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/12/08
Laury Dear, this is just the best--absooutely--so creative with ideas and choice of words. I hope it's first place in EC.
Patty Wysong05/12/08
This is just too darling!! I absolutely loooooove it! and I could see the illustrations so clearly. Superb, Sweetie--absolutely wonderful. No matter the outcome, it's WONderful!! Hugs!!!
Yvonne Blake 05/12/08
Is there such a thing as chick dialect?
love the names!this is so cute! MMMMWAAAA
Amy Michelle Wiley 05/12/08
Ha! I hear birds and animals singing and talking all the time--felt like you'd crawled in my head. :-D It took me until the second sentence with it before I figured out what "tuk" was, but once I did everything made total sense. Fun story!
Beth LaBuff 05/13/08
I think you are fluent in Chickese. :) Your names, "Eggman," "Eggsmeralda," Eggbert," and "Eggylou" were way to much fun! Then I had to smile at the "A little girl chick was cracking up inside." and "I feel all scrambled inside." ! ! :) This is my kind of humor. Love it!!
Lyn Churchyard05/13/08
Oh my, having been raised on a poultry farm I can relate to this. I just loved the interaction between the chicks while they were in the shells. What an absolute hoot, I was grinning like a fool all the way through. Super job, absolutely well done Laury!
Joshua Janoski05/13/08
Haha. So wonderfully funny, but I wouldn't expect anything less from you. :)

I loved the names of all the chicks. I also loved all the corny egg jokes like when he said to "go suck an egg." Hilarious! Eggsmeralda's accent was a riot too.

There is nothing in this story to not like. Even the title is eye catching. Great job big sis!
Marita Thelander 05/13/08
A gynormously, wonderful, eggsellent story. Love your quirky, fun personality shining through this piece!
Joy Faire Stewart05/14/08
Oh, I loved it! The dialogue is perfect and unique writing on top. Great job.
Mariane Holbrook 05/14/08
If this doesn't place high, then I'm the proverbial monkey's uncle! Adorable!!
Aaron Morrow05/14/08
Great job! Loved the "beak iz tuk" part.

In reading it I wonder if the Jason and the teacher were even necessary, though they were used to great effect to set the stage early.

Hilarious! Kudos!
Angela M. Baker-Bridge05/14/08
Very creative and funny. I needed a good laugh before calling it a night. Thanks.
LaNaye Perkins05/15/08
What a cute and wonderful story. I loved all the little chicks and Jason too. Great writing.
Peter Stone05/15/08
Oh my, that's got to be one of the funniest, cutest things I've seen on FW. How on earth did you think of this? I loved all of it, the chick's names, the puns, their cackling at each other, and especially this line “Vat? Am bizzy now. Vedy bizzy. Iz tuk, beak iz tuk.” Well done!
Beth LaBuff 05/15/08
Laury -- Congrats!!! I'm so excited for you!
LauraLee Shaw05/15/08
Congrats on 1st place and 2nd overall. I'm sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooGYNORMOUSLY happy for you, and am giggling and gaggling songs of praise on your behalf! Up to Masters for you, where you belong!
Sara Harricharan 05/15/08
WHOOO HOO! WOW! Congratulations! So happy for you! Awesome writing! ^_^
Loren T. Lowery05/15/08
Way to go Laury - you have a wonderful gift. Thank-you for sharing and adding a bit of joy to our world. Loren
Karen Wilber05/15/08
This is great. "Beak iz tuk" "Vat?" You mixed many different styles of humor (visual, dialect, puns, situational) to good effect. Congrats on EC.
Sheri Gordon05/15/08
Congratulations on your EC, Laury. I am so glad to see this story place. This made me laugh at a time when I really needed one. Great job.
Beckie Stewart05/15/08
I want to see this illustrated in a children's book. This is delightful! I love it.
Emily Ritter05/16/08
I think titles are very important, and yours was what drew me in! The story did not disappoint. I really enjoy this kind of writing. Writing it, and reading it as well! Please write more! (perhaps you could expand this too?)
Kate Grey06/05/08
Delightful. I really enjoyed the chickies. I loved the "sunny side" song, the stuck beak, and the playfulness.