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Previous Challenge Entry (EDITOR'S CHOICE)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)

TITLE: Admissions Office
By Lori Othouse
03/13/08
~2nd Place


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Heaven’s admissions office, this morning:

“Mornin’ Sal! Beautiful day, isn’t it?”

“As always, Ben.”

Ben looked at the large folder in Sal‘s hand. “Is that another one?”

“Yes, he’s not here yet but he will be soon.”

“So what’s his story?”

Sal sat down next to Ben, plunking the heavy folder on the table in front of them. “Car accident…about 20 minutes ago, their time. He was only 42.”

Ben opened the folder and looked over the information. His eyes widened as he turned the pages.

“Wow, this guy had it all…talent, personality, looks. So many spiritual gifts, too! The Master really blessed him. He must’ve been a powerhouse for the Kingdom down there!”

Sal’s expression was grim. “Keep going.”

Ben continued flipping through the pages until he got to the end and then looked confused. “Where’s the section of his rewards? Did I miss it? Surely he did some wonderful things with all his abilities.”

“I’m afraid you won’t find very much in the eternal section of his life folder. He was given so much and dabbled here and there, but spent the vast majority of his time accumulating things for himself. You can see he has, well, had a very nice car.” Sal pointed through the pages in the folder. “Big house, vacations, designer clothes-”

“But those are just things!” Ben interrupted. “Where’s the good stuff? The lasting stuff! All of that other stuff will be forgotten as soon as he sets foot here.”

“Exactly. And that’s not the worst part. Look at this.”

Sal turned to a section full of notes and pictures.

“Wow, what’s all this?” Ben wondered.

“That, my friend…is what could have been. All that the Master had planned for him. All the lives that were never touched because he just sat on what he had or used it just for himself. I‘m sure he thought he had more time. They all do.”

Ben blinked as he turned the pages. “Look at all these people. I sure hope someone else will reach them…” his voice drifted off.

“Me too, but only the Master knows that right now.”

Ben thought for a moment. “Well, he must’ve gone to church, right? Surely he did something there.”

“Oh, he went…unless he had other plans. He would even throw a few dollars in the collection plate now and then. He wasn’t overtly disobedient, at least in man's perception, but he never made much of an effort to do any more than the bare minimum. He loved God, in his own way, but he just loved himself so much more.”

“Will he make it?” Ben asked softly.

“He’ll make it, barely.” Sal answered. “But he won’t be bringing much with him.”

Sal pulled two thin sheets of paper from the folder. “Out of all this man did his whole life, this is all that will remain. Not much to build an eternal home with, is it?”

The two were silent as they looked over the man’s life spread out before them. Suddenly an alarm sounded.

“He’s here,” Sal announced. “Let’s go.”

He stood, holding the two thin sheets in his hand. Looking back at Ben, he motioned to the folder. “You know what to do with the rest of that.”

Ben nodded. Slowly he picked up the folder and walked over to a large incinerator. He heaved the folder inside and quickly shut the door. Shaking off the heat and ash and trying to smile, he joined Sal as they made their way down to the front gate.

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Sally Hanan03/13/08
Ouch! A very creative take on the theme, and you captured a lot in your dialogue without blaring out the details.
Holly Westefeld03/13/08
This was a very creative take on the "skin of the teeth" theme for this topic.
Lynda Lee Schab 03/14/08
Oh, I LOVE this. Such a perfect entry for this topic and from a creative viewpoint, too. Definitely drives the point home. Bravo!
Loren T. Lowery03/14/08
I enjoyed reading this story immensely. I wish it could be continued. Reminds me a bit of "It's a Wonderful Life".
Laury Hubrich 03/14/08
Great job! This is very thought-provoking in a most creative way.
Laury
Kristen Hester03/15/08
Great story and a very creative take on the topic. I lost a friend a few days ago in a car wreck, so I've already been thinking a lot about what really matters. This just drives those thoughts home. Bravo!
Amy Michelle Wiley 03/15/08
Great reminder to all of us! Good job.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/16/08
This is creative, convicting, and challenging. Well done.
Karin Fiscaletti03/18/08
Excellent way of sending this message! I thoroughly enjoyed reading and listening to it. Alot of people need to hear this, including me.
Loren T. Lowery03/20/08
Congratulations on your placement. I really enjoyed this story. Loren
Sara Harricharan 03/20/08
Oooh, ouch! What a reminder for all of us. I wasn't sure what kind of office at first, but when I saw where this was going, I felt sad for the guy. This was pretty good. ***Congrats on your EC!***
Debbie Wistrom03/20/08
Creative and insightful. Thanks for sharing this and congratulations.
Sheri Gordon03/20/08
Congratulations on your EC. This is excellent. Loved the dialogue. Such a powerful message, but not preachy. Great job with the topic.
Joanne Sher 03/20/08
So vivid and to-the-point - a message we ALL need to hear! Congratulations - very well-deserving!
Dianne Janak03/21/08
Oh my... this is power packed. Right on target, right on topic, and right on Scripture. In every way RIGHT ON! Sad, scary, convicting, but the sun is still shining.. time for all to make HAY! Congrats on a well deserved win...
Catrina Bradley 03/24/08
Congratulations! This is one that definitely needs to be shared with the world!
Jacquelyn Horne03/31/08
Food for thought here. Congrats on the win.