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Previous Challenge Entry (EDITOR'S CHOICE)
Topic: Bold (emotionally) (08/30/07)

TITLE: Of Course Your Mom Went to Prom
By Marilee Alvey
09/05/07
~2nd Place


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Dear Diary,

I've got to find a victim for prom. Seems like every store has a separate area filled with poofy, shiny, glossy, sparkly dresses. Every time I try to walk past the prom racks to the “Plain and Ordinary Loser Section” I end up with a booty covered with silver dust. You’d think that would attract attention. Not even. I HAVE to go to the prom just once. I don’t want my kids to know that their mom was such a loser. Okay, Marcie, time to get jiggy with it. Code name: Destination Prom.

Dear Diary,

I opened my locker after fourth hour and looked into the mirror I’d glued to the inside door. My puny eyes looked like two bugs, each with eight very short legs. I took out my mascara wand and put several coats on my lashes, all sixteen of them. Ahhh. Just the effect I was going for: my eyes now resembled two bugs with mascara’d legs that now stood stiff and erect, in death. Okay, go for the mouth. I put on color, then applied a coat of shimmery silver. It always looks sensual on models. Looked like I’d been slimed. I straightened up to my full 5 ft 6 (with help from my two inch wedgies.) Tom Maloy was at my one o’clock. My weapon of choice: an over the shoulder sultry look. Alas, some organic nature freak lost a grape on the floor. Glad tidings: my tall wedgies found it, just as I tilted my neck for the big, sultry over the shoulder vamp. The doctor said my neck brace can be removed in a few days. There is NO WAY I am wearing it to school. If I wear it, my neck won’t go anywhere…..but neither will I.

Dear Diary,

Kill me now. Mom followed me into school and saw me take my neck brace off. She’s grounded me from all social activities for a week. She’s got a spy in the Principal’s office. Her snoopy friend Sally sits right in the glassed area I have to pass for my classes. I told mom that there’s no way I can ever get a date this way, but she asked me, “How big is your God?” I hate when she turns into little Miss Sunshine on me. I’ve developed negativism to an art form. She should respect that. At least I excel at something.

Dear Diary,
Today I walked down the hall with that stupid neck brace, stiffly tilting my head to nod at friends, like some walking Disney character. I’m living my worst nightmare….. except that I’m not naked….and giving a speech. Tomorrow I can go to school with my neck brace off. Zero hour, baby. The dresses…and the boys….are getting picked over. I’m almost ready to consider my brother. No, I did NOT say that.

Dear Diary,

Today I broke the mold. I was spunky. I was gutsy. I was fearless. Okay. I was rock bottom desperate. I walked into the lunchroom wearing a big sign I made saying, “ASK ME TO PROM” with my phone number on it. Most of the girls gave me dirty looks. I was REALLY embarrassed, but, hey, I figured I’d already strutted my stuff for two days earning the nickname, “Concrete Neck.” There was no place to go but up. Guess what? Kevin Hines called me! He told me he was impressed by my self-confidence, that most girls are afraid to look stupid. That was a compliment, right? Totally. So, I’m going to Prom with a first string varsity football player!

Dear Diary,

I’ll never forget my first prom, thanks to my dad who undoubtedly put the B-O in BOLD. Last night Kevin came to my front door carrying my corsage. UNFORTUNATELY, my dad answered the door. “Who are you?” he asked. “I’m Kevin Hines. I’m here to pick up Marcie for the prom.” Dad paused for a moment, sized Kevin up with a glance, and said, “No you’re not!” slamming the door in Kevin’s face. Mom was helping me get ready when she heard the exchange and ran downstairs like some running back, slipping down the last five steps. How she managed to kill dad with a look, open the door, smooth over dad’s rude greeting and invite Kevin in for photos before going to the ER is beyond human understanding. She only has to wear her neck brace for a month.

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Verna Cole Mitchell 09/06/07
A delightful read. I loved your humor.
Dianne Janak09/07/07
Loved this piece! Funny, real, BOLD For SURE, and well written! A HOOT for me and a HOLLER! ( Texan for YIPPEEEE.. this is a winner!)
Joanne Sher 09/08/07
What a hoot! You've got that teen voice DOWN PAT. Fun from start to finish.
Sherry Wendling09/08/07
I'm howling! Superb, authentic tone, perky pace, adorable story-line, plot twist at the end...This is beyond entertaining! I feel as though I know this kid. (Hmmm, yup. She's my little sister!) Fabulous read.
Dee Yoder 09/08/07
So funny! That teen girl thing is down pat in this story. (Makes me kinda glad I have a boy.) Great writing gives this story the flavor it needs-high school angst and everything that goes with it.
Laurie Walker09/09/07
If only I had been so bold!!!

Sadly, I will have to hang my head in shame when my kids ask if I went to prom...

LOVED THIS! Thanks for making me laugh.
Betty Castleberry09/09/07
This is loads of fun. It's written with wit and humor, and I like the diary format, too. Well done.
Jacquelyn Horne09/10/07
Things we would only tell a diary! Enjoyable read.
Kristen Hester09/10/07
This is such fun. Your voice is perfect for a teen. Great job. I really enjoyed it. I loved how it ended...like mother, like daughter...in a neck brace. Bravo.
Lisa Holloway09/11/07
“How big is your God?” I could just hear the mother's voice. My goodness, but this piece was hilarious. The whole thing was a happily-ended exercise in pain!
Sharlyn Guthrie09/11/07
What fun! I love the sarcastic teen routine and the slightly twisted, but totally believable family dynamics. The last paragraph, and particularly the last line were brilliant!
Dianne Janak09/13/07
AHA!! You won girlfriend! FIRST PLACE MASTERS! How is that cupotea?? ANd yes you deserved it.. I LOVED your piece and so did everyone else.. CELEBRATE this .. and enjoy.. you deserved it!
Verna Cole Mitchell 09/13/07
Three cheers on your win for this delightful piece. On top of the "heap" is the best place to be!
Patty Wysong09/13/07
What a fun read!! I loved that teen voice and how bold she was! :-)
Janice Cartwright09/13/07
Totally delightful. This is chock-full of comic gems and so, so well done.
Beth LaBuff 09/13/07
Cute, Sweet, and Fun! You pick which order those go in. I loved it! Congrats on your EC!
Sheri Gordon09/13/07
Congratulations on your EC. This is really cute, and so well written. Great job with the topic.
Dolores Stohler09/13/07
Congratulations on your win. Your story was hilarious. Reminded me of ancient times when I was so desperate to get a date for the prom that I asked a boy myself. He turned me down very sweetly, saying he'd like to go but it was expensive and he just didn't have the money. At the time I was devastated but later married a man who danced divinely--he could cook too, lol. Getting back to the present, I LOVED your story!
Catrina Bradley 09/13/07
Lots of smiles from me reading this. Great job - congrats, Marilee!
Loren T. Lowery09/13/07
This was/is just soooo funny. The kind of chuckle that helps me get through the day. Thanks for writing and sharing your talent and congratulations on your placement!
Mo 09/13/07
I liked the 2nd to last entry best. Congrats on your Win!