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TITLE: The Making of Our Nation
By
04/04/09
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"Gather around,
And listen to me,
And I will tell you all that I've seen"

The birch and the pine,
The thistle and oak,
Moved closer to see,
Why they'd been awoke.

The one that had been talking,
Was old as could be,
The forest sure knew,
That was one wise old tree.

I've long been around,
And I've seen a lot,
One day I was sleeping,
And out rang a shot.

I saw a young man,
No more than a boy,
Then I saw on his chest,
A wound, what a mess!

I knew not what to do,
I must have been scared,
He fell at my trunk,
Move not I dared.

But something about him,
By the look on his face,
Said his life was not lost,
It sure wasn't a waste.

As he took his last breath,
He said,"All this strife,
Was for the liberty of my son
And my wife.

The next morning when
They took him away,
I heard the word "war"
Was what brought the dismay.

The fighting the killing,
The death of so many,
Would later give freedom,
and liberty to any.

When the war was over,
The men gave a shout,
"It was the grace of God,
That drove the British out!"

There was peace for a while,
Though there sure came another,
For this time I knew
It was brother against brother.

This time a man came,
Out of the brush,
From what I saw,
He ran in a rush.

I knew I must do something,
It had to be done,
For if you do nothing,
The war won't be won.

As I hid him with leaves,
I heard him pray,
"Thank you dear Lord,
For leading my way."

Then I saw some men,
I knew what they'd come for,
I was glad the man within my leaves,
Was safe from the death of war.

This war was different,
Would it never end,
Not North versus South,
But friend against friend.

The war did end,
Finally, at last!
I shiver to think of
The many who'd passed.

This war was horrid,
They fought 'till the end,
The one you had killed,
Was only your friend.

As they walked out to battle,
No enemy in sight,
Just your brother, your father,
Oh how could I fight?

I cringe to think,
Of all that had died,
"It was for liberty!"
Those soldiers had cried.

The war was soon over,
I knew there'd be more,
Though all would not,
Be fought on our own shore.

What's the common factor?
Whats the conclusion?
What was in those men,
That founded a nation?

Follow the Lord, the King,
Our great God we must.
Remember this motto,
"In God do we trust."

As we end this great story,
Remember the cost,
It was for your liberty,
Those men's lives had been lost.
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