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I now like this amusing poem about watching pregnant women. I wanted to know if it is too light and frivilous.
Round Is Not A Pregnant Shape, A Poem By Peter Menkin
For about 8 years I worked off and on at the department store Sears on a part time basis.It was mainly on. A few poems about observations while on duty as a sales clerk were written. Herewith, a poem from 2002 on what I saw at Sears. There were only a few of these poems, originally posted on the Atlantic Monthly Writerís Workshop (now defunct). I am sorry I did not write more of them, as 7 years later I like this one and another.
One canít call two or three poems a series, and because I keep poems Iíve written on my computer, I will search to see if there are more. Some people think it unfair to be revising or looking at poems 7 or 8 years old. One poet remarked to me that this wasnít so unusual, to keep an image or a sense of a poem in ones mind for years.
My way is to return to work written sometimes as long ago as 8 years or even nine, and revise. I find at times that I begin to like the poem, where before I did not like it so much or found it lacking. I do hope you like this one as it is an amusement. So as I say, herewith the poem:
Round is Not a Pregnant Shape
by Peter Menkin
Three pregnant women
last night at the store.
Each carried her self,
proving round is not
a pregnant shape.
I watch the pregnant women
as they shop, and walk,
move about with children
This is part of my
store duties, I tell myself:
Pregnant woman watching.
There are ovals, and mountains,
abundance, and full.
There are heavier, and moving,
ripe and blooming. Some are a little bit more.
Amid this there is something
new, alive, awakening to two
and wonderment moving towards
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