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TITLE: Fantasy Real Forever + Power Tools (or God's Toolbox)*
By Jacob Gibson
11/28/08
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A fast-paced electronic/dance song about the fantasy genre. I know I don't have to tell you how the song would sound, but I like to just for fun. (Because I like dance and we need more Christian dance music!) Thanks for the critiques!! And remember that although fantasy is fun, we should be careful not to live in a fantasy world. (This is still under some construction and consideration and just an experiment)
1. Monsters, magic, mermaids, werewolves
Bizarre creatures and talking beasts
Hobbits, dwarves, elves, and fairies
Legends and myths of great heroes deceased

Grab your gold sword and fight the dragon,
or tame it and ride it through the wild skies
Enter the portal to a whole new world
Where anything and everything could arise!

(chorus) F-f-f-fantasy! In our wildest fan-ta-sies real and forever!
Dreams that flow through our minds, captivate us like a rainbow
If it's beyond our grasp and makes us gasp, it' will fit perfectly

Why do we hold onto these extraordinary fancies?
Why do we always reach for the impossible?
Why do we always wish we could flyyyyyyyyyyyyy? Why oh why?

2. Secrets in the deep or in the dark
Underground, unseen, or in other dimesions
New creatures, super powers, magical items
Tales from an unconventional mind's inventions

Life and death, love and hate
Amazing dreams and frightening nightmares
A mixture of the ordinary into something extraordinary
Stretch your imagination as far as you dare!

(chorus)

Would you believe that your greatest fantasies could come true?
Would you believe there's a secret world around us...
With angels and demons and powers to our disposal?
Woud you believe... that faith is the key?

Our hearts always hunger for something more.
To escape the normal and find the sublime
To finally come home with our Creator and loved ones.
And discover a whole new reality

There are those who laugh and call us crazy
But deep inside they feel the same
Do you realy want to live an ordinary life?
I didn't think so... why don't you climb aboard!

(chorus)

----- POWER TOOLS (OR GOD'S TOOLBOX) -----

All of us have been assigned by the highest Authority in the universe to complete a very big task and He has equipped us with everything we need to get it done. We are His tools that He wants to use to fix this broken world and what He has in mind is more fullfilling than anything else. If this song was played, I would like it song to be an industrial rock with musicians making music with the sounds of tools like hammers, saws, wrenches, etc. Remember... you can do it! He can help. (Not my best work but oh well)
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(song begins with the sounds of tools that eventually blends into the rock music)

1 Built with materials of the highest quality
Fashioned to work completely effective
Hand-made with extreme precision and
Hooked up to the greatest power of all

The greatest instruments of His creation, made to fix this broken world.
His beloved devices of love and mercy, designed to last forever!!

(Chorus) We are the power tools! Created to do good works in Him.
Products of the utmost intelligent design, resting in the Master’s tool box.
When you finally let go you’ll finally start to know what it means to really live.
Put on your hard helmet and let’s get to work. We’ve got a better world to build!

Tool sounds (ting! tong! ting! tong! bang! clang! bing! bong! crank! slam! crank! slam! zzzz! zzzz! zzzz! zzzz!) etc.

2 If you’re a hammer He’ll lead you to the nails
If you’re a level He’ll set your straight
If you’re a saw He’ll help you make the cut
Whatever you are He’ll take you to the job!

We all have special talents and interests, we all have the same goal to reach.
Let Him use you as He sees fit, and we’ll build a bridge that goes straight to Heaven!

(chorus and tool sounds)

3 Sometimes it might seem like you’re too small to do much in this big world
But sometimes the smallest tools of all are the ones that do the most
When you’re hooked up to the master generator you better watch out
You could do much more than you thought possible and just might surprise yourself

(chorus and tool sounds)

Spoken words: Can we fix it? Yes we can! Can we build it? Yes we can! With His power there’s nothing we can’t do! No sweat.

(instrumental finish)
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