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TRUST JESUS TODAY
This is just a story I wrote for my 3 year old niece.
A Child Of The King
Once upon a time there was an orphan lost and poor,
Who's heart was filled with sorrow and broken to the core.
The orphan thought that worldly things
Might ease the ache and sufferings.
But the orphan was never satisfied,
because of emptiness growing inside.
"Maybe if I do good,I'll find happiness,"
the orphan thought."That would grant my wish."
But every idea that was cast
There was no joy that would last.
All the land was infested with wickedness and hate,
Ruled by the prince of darkness, Louis the great.
Louis often spent his days making evil goals
Roaring like a lion and devouring lonely souls.
One day Louis tempted the orphan to join in his game;
so the orphan did take part and added to the shame.
The orphan knew something was wrong and tried to run away,
but Louis caught up quick and made the orphan stay.
" I can't be here anymore!" the orphan screamed in pain.
but Louis showed no mercy, he just stayed the same.
"Please,let me go,"said the orphan trying to be brave.
Louis said,"Until your debt is paid you shall be my slave.
Louis always tortured and kept the orphan bound.
The orphan spoke sadly with tears falling down.
"Who can pay my debt, for the cost is far too much?
Who can take my trials, all the burdens from my clutch?
Who can bare my grief and understand my every hurt?
Who can grant me PEACE and forgive each sinful work?"
There was a Prince Of Light who was standing near by;
He was dressed all in white and was touched by the orphan's cry.
He said,"My Father has sent Me for you.Now, What can I do for thee?"
"Pay my debt," the orphan said. "Please, set me free."
The Prince picked up the orphan and wiped away the tears;
Told Louis, "This Child belongs to me, never was this one yours!"
He took the orphan and said, "My Father has sent for thee."
As He carried the orphan He said, "You will soon see."
Before the orphan uncovered what this all could mean,
The orphan then discovered the presence of the King.
The King handed over a Holy book full of His word;
said, "Read it well so that in your life it will be heard.
Now that you've accepted this precious gift of peace,
What have you for me, at the very least?"
The orphan thought this was a mistake
and at this time the orphan spake,
"My Lord, why hast Thou sent for me,
I have nothing to offer Thee.
Giving You my service and my love,
Giving You myself is not enough,
Only a bitter me I bring;
Just me, my King,my offering."
Then the King said, "Do not despair,"
and gave the orphan a crown to wear.
"I will make you royalty,
and as my child you shall be."
And then being overwhelmed to bow
The king's child made this solemn vow,
"I will serve You and be Your light
to all who can't see in the dark of night.
I will give my life for thee
because You gave Your love to me.
Never will I be an orphan ever again,
and I will live happily ever after." The End
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