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Adventures of Ron Huckleberry...#1-3 Ron is a war-prisoner
This particular day is especially beautiful. The sun is bright, there are flowers every where, and the birds are very active. It seems that there are birds in every tree…and there are so many large trees in Aunt Jane’s huge yard and the nearby fields.
Aunt Jane is an early riser, which suits this ten year old very well. He loves to get started early. After breakfast he quickly gets dressed, gives Aunty a kiss, and heads for the back yard.
“Don’t go too far, we need to do some shopping a little later.” Auntie yells.
“OK, I’ll only be in the yard.” At the far end of the back yard there is a much wooded area...much like a small forest. The back yard and the little forest are separated by a four strand barbed-wire fence.
As usual Ron's imagination is running wild. At this moment he visualizes a war movie he recently saw. He is now a prisoner and this barbed wire fence is the prison fence. “I must get through this fence to escape”, he is thinking.
Ron quickly checks to see where the enemy guards are at this moment. No guards are in sight. “Its breakfast time, so they must be eating”, he whispers to himself. He quickly lies on his back and digs the heals of his tennis shoes into the ground and begins to push himself under the wire.
Suddenly his short pants are snared in the barbed wire. "Oh no!”, he whispers to himself. The guards will see me if I don't free myself quickly". He pushes and pulls to free his shorts with out tearing them, but he's really snagged.
“Auntie will be angry if I ruin my shorts, but freedom is more important“. He holds the wire strand and jerks his leg. His leg is suddenly free, but his shorts are ruined.
"What's that noise? Oh no, the guards are coming. I have to get on the other side and run".
He pushes harder and is finally free of the fence. He is quickly on his feet and running for the trees to find a place to hide.
Suddenly the guards are screaming and pointing towards the woods. Moments later there is rifle fire and rounds are hitting the trees near him and he knows the guards will soon be searching for him.
Ron runs as fast as he can, but he is getting very tired. He knows the guards will catch up with him and that will be awful, because he knows how these soldiers torture prisoners. He sees a very thick area of trees off to his right and heads straight to them. He is now near completely out of breath. “What can I do?” he is thinking.
He says to himself, “Japanese soldiers often hid in tree tops to snip at American solders, so I must climb high in a tree to hide from these Japanese soldiers.”
He sees a large tree that has a limb low enough for him to reach. He races for the limb and with his last bit of energy manages to climb upwards. “I must get very high and hope the soldiers don’t see me“, he is thinking.
He finally gets very near the top and finds a limb large enough for him to safely rest and hopefully be hid from the enemy soldiers. He is just getting somewhat secure when he hears the soldiers nearing the area where he is. "Oh, please don't let them see me." he says to himself.
Ron sits very quietly almost afraid to breath. He sees four soldiers coming near his area and he is almost in tears. Through a crack in the leaves he can see them heading directly towards his tree. They stop and stand under the tree talking. Naturally he can't understand a word, but they are excited.
After what seems like hours the soldiers begin walking away from his tree. Suddenly Ron hears Auntie calling, "Ron, we need to go shopping." Ron can't yell back to Auntie, because the soldiers will hear him. He must quietly and quickly climb down the tree and rush back to Auntie.
He is soon with Aunty and she is not at all happy with Ron for ruining his shorts. “My goodness, Ron, where have you been. What have you been doing. How did you ruin your shorts. How did you get so dirty?“ She has Ron wash down in the bath and put on clean shorts before going into Little Town to shop. While driving to town she looks at Ron and asks if he feeling OK.
“Yes, Aunty, why do you ask?”
“You look so tired…like you’ve been running and got out of breath”, she replies. Ron sits quietly for a moment and then begins to laugh out loud.
“Aunty, you would not believe where I’ve been. I’m just lucky to have escaped, so I can be back with you”, he explains with a very straight face.
“So you’ve been playing war games again. Was it Germans or Japanese this time?” she teases him.
“Oh Auntie, I love you. You never make fun of me.” he says as he hugs her arm.
© GENE HUDGENS
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