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Adventures of Ron Huckelberry...#19 Granddaddy tries to kill a big rat
Grandmother’s house is very large and very old. As you enter the front door you enter a small hall way, where Grandmother’s piano stands. On the left is a door that enters into the guest bed room. Nest to this door is located the stairs going to the attic. There is not door at the top or bottom of the stairs. The attic is large, but is only used for storage and sometimes Granddaddy spreads potatoes out to dry.
Granddaddy has known that there are rats in the attic, because he has heard them thump down the stairs late at night. At the end of the small hall room is a door that opens into the very long glassed-in porch that runs the full length of the house.
As you enter the porch the first door on the left opens into Grandmother’s bed room. The next door on the left opens into the dining room. There are glass windows between the hall way and these two rooms. There is no electricity in the porch room.
Granddaddy has told Ron and Grandmother that he is going to kill that darn rat. Granddaddy is seventy five and can’t see to awfully well. That evening at about 11 p.m. he hears the rat coming down the stairs. He has left the door open so the rat can easily go into the porch area. He stands at the bed room window looking out into the porch area and sees the rat enter the porch room.
Grandmother hands Granddaddy a glass kerosene lamp. Granddaddy tells Ron to stay in the bedroom and he opens the door and steps into the porch room. He immediately closes the door so the rat can not get back to the piano room and upstairs.
Granddaddy has the lamp in his left hand and a metal poker in the right. He is barefooted.
Granddaddy goes slowly down the porch looking for the rat. Suddenly the rat races past Granddaddy and heads towards the closed door.
Granddaddy turns to follow the rat. At the door area Granddaddy can not see the rat. As he is looking around, Ron quietly enters the porch and stands near Granddaddy.
The door frame is extremely old and had an inset of about four inches. The rat was shocked to find the door closed, scared that Granddaddy would find him…and had jumped high on the door frame and lodged himself in the frame-inset.
When Granddaddy raised the poker to hit the rat, the rat jumped onto Granddaddy’s need to and off onto the floor.
Granddaddy was shocked and dropped the glass lamp, which broke into a million pieces near his and Ron’s feet.
Now Granddaddy is afraid of the rat and he is standing barefooted in broken glass and can’t move. He begins screaming, “Ginny” (that’s what he called Grandmother), help me. I can’t move. Bring some house shoes quickly.”
Grandmother quickly sweeps the glass off to the side and gives Granddaddy house shoes. This is when he realizes Ron is standing next to him, in glass and barefooted. He started to yell at Ron, but instead grabbed him by the shoulder and picked him up and pushed him into the bedroom. Grandmother handed Granddaddy a flash light and so the hunter again went down the porch area looking for the rat.
Granddaddy found the huge rat lodged between the wall and the coal box. He took the poker and poked the old rat to death and left him there until morning.
Granddaddy then went into the bedroom to continue fussing at Ron, as Grandmother is laughing as she, at 11:30 p.m. is explaining the fiasco to Auntie on the phone.
So goes another episode of “funny farm’.
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