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Adventures of Ron Huckelberry...#16 Ron and Dad fish for mice
It must have been a spring day because the front door was open. There was a screen door which was closed.
Dad was sitting on the couch reading the newspaper. All was quiet until Dad jumps up from the couch, screams, throws the newspaper on the floor, jumps up and down and suddenly runs out of the house…he ran right through the screen door.
Outside he jumped up and down and shook his pants leg. Suddenly a tiny mouse fell onto the ground. The mouse ran off and Dad finally gained his composure. Mom came running to see what the problem.
Dad is so mad. “Honey, I’m going to kill every mouse in the house and in this yard”. He states.
He nears the shattered screen door and apologies to Mom. “Honey, I’ll make a new door tomorrow”. He says. He goes into the living room and picks up the scattered news paper.
“Honey, I’m serious. Starting tonight the hunting season opens on the mice on this property. It will take a lot of night time, so will you support me”? Dad asks.
“You know I’ll support you, but you have to get some sleep too. How are you going to kill the mice”? She asks.
“I’m going fishing”. Dad replies.
“Now what does that mean”? Mom asks.
Ron’s dad explains that after supper he is going to fix the kitchen light so that it shines brightly near the door to the kitchen and then set about ten mouse traps in the kitchen. Then I’m going to run fishing line from the traps, through the dining room and into the living room. In the living room he will attach the line to the fishing poles. Then I’ll go fishing. Mom seems to understand.
After supper Dad positions a chair in the living room facing the kitchen. Ron wants to help and dad allows Ron to sit next to him and watch this combat operation. Within minutes the first mouse nibbles on a trap’s bait and dad jerks the trap and the mouse’s neck is broken. Before dad can head towards the kitchen another mouse is nosey and is also soon dead. After they have killed five mice, Ron and his dad go to the kitchen to reset the traps. They put the dead mice into the round metal stove. Dad said he will get up early and burn the mice.
“Dad, why are there so many mice in the house”. Ron asked.
“The house is old. There are many nut trees in the yard. There is a tool shed in the back yard. The neighbors have the same situation. This entire area is a mice heaven”. Dad explained.
Ron gets to pull lines for about two hours before mom takes him to bed. Dad stays up until after midnight. Dad keeps a written account of the number of mice caught on this fishing trip. He and mom were very surprised that dad had killed 185 mice before going to bed. He had put all 185 mice into the little stove.
The next morning he poured a small amount of kerosene on the mice and lit the stove.
Within ten minutes the house was stinking so badly with burnt mice that Mom opened all windows and still had to sit in the car for an hour. Later in the day she even bought air freshener, which she used all day.
© GENE HUDGENS
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