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TITLE: Rain Of Pain
By Corinne Mann
03/22/08
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You carefully selected a man for me,
Someone you knew was just right

You only asked for my obedience and patience,
As you prepared a time for he and I to meet

Instead I grew impatient with your plan,
Sadly, I didn't wait for the one you chose

I met a man whom I chose to marry,
Today I am going to be his bride

Now husband and wife we began our lives together,
As any new bride I looked forward to our future

He took those vows that were said that day,
Twisted them around carrying them out his way

The man I chose did not follow your way,
For he had a dark plan of his own

Unaware of the disaster my choice would bring,
Before too long I found myself captive to him

He was rageful and violent most of the time,
Yelling and hitting me by day and by night

A dark cloud of despair set into my heart,
Rain came down telling the horrible truth

I was living in fear of the man I chose,
Terror and fear came in the wake of each day

It was always a mystery what would happen next,
Never knowing when the next time he would explode

The days turned to months and then a few years,
Little by little I was slipping away from myself

Shattered,battered and destroyed inside,
I would cry out to you for help and comfort

Although you were near and watching,
You were silent and I did not know why

The abuse kept happening day after day,
I felt guilty and blamed myself for it all

For being so weak and not standing tall,
Allowing my fear of him to make me fall

Deeper and deeper into this mess I fell,
Until I could not see anything else at all

Just terrible sorrow and neverending pain,
My rain of pain was a long season in time

My whole life was controlled by him,
Battered by his forces of violence

I had to get out and the time was now,
The only question in my mind was how?

It took me five years of marriage to be free,
Now that I am I now know why you were silent

Though you were there and you still loved me,
You allowed me to make my own painful decision

Now years later I can see what you meant for me,
To be loved by a godly man who loves his Lord

I know now if I had listened to you and waited,
It would have all turned out so differently

I would have been living happily ever after,
With the one you had chosen for me to marry

Thank you for forgiving me for my disobedience,
I know that you love me and helped me to stand

You gently guided me away from that man,
Today I am so thankful for my safety

At the hands of one man so much took place,
All I can do now is to seek your face

I was broken into pieces like shattered glass,
It was you Lord that put me together again

You carried me during the storm of those days,
Gave me the strength to live through it all

Jesus, you are the bright light in the shadows,
You are my Prince of peace now and forever

I am thankful for all that you have done,
In You there is truth, You are the healing one
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