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TITLE: Diamond Man
By David (The Goliath Assassin)
03/10/08
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Diamond Man was going to be its own separate album, but I'm not sure if there's enough material. I might just fuse it with "When A Brave Man Stands." I haven't decided yet. Anyhow, this would be the title track if an album called "Diamond Man" were to stand on its own.

It's very personal to me, and it was extremely hard to write, despite how rediculously easy it was to conceptualize. I think Christian men get treated as less in today's world, by women who aren't Christian, or are and have lost their footing at times. This is my answer to that social problem. I see it as a voice which had to be expressed. A need I had to fill.
It first began in the eighth grade
When Jenna asked what I would say
If she went down into my pants.
I was so shocked. My eyebrows danced.

I said that Iíd probably freak
And then she laughed. She laughed at me.
But I said ďLookÖ I tell the truth.Ē
And I said ďI donít even know you.Ē

The pressure comesÖ and then it goes.
And how Iíll act I always know.
I just canít bring myself too close
To anyone that I donít know.

It RIPS ME UP! I hurt inside
When I can look into your eyes
And you tell me Iím just a boy
And that I think your bodyís a toy!

The pressure comes! The pressure goes!
And you donít know me! You just donít know!
And my heart BURNS looking at you!
This twisted STRANGER I THOUGH I KNEW!

And the inSULT! IT BURNS MY EYES!
You act as if I DONíT HAVE A MIND!
And if I DO, then itís been CRACKED!
Just like the rest! But they canít change the fact thatÖ

You look at me and you see
A view of men from ten thousand feet!
I look at you and I wonder who
You think I am to be judged byÖ
You look at me and you see
A view of men from ten thousand feet!
Try if you can just to stay my hand!
One day youíll understand that Iím a Diamond Man!

And then I canít argue with you
Because Iíve done things I should never do.
Iíve lost some friends I wish Iíd kept.
And Iíve repented! Oh how Iíve wept!

But that was then. And this is now.
And those mistakes I will not allow
To come again and pressure me.
My mind is restored, but you donít seeÖ

That this is LOVE I offer you.
And you donít trust anything I do!
ĎCause youíve been broken in the past!
And I threaten your house of glass!

ĎCuz Iím a BULL wearing no shame!
Iím foreign to you! Those goats that came
Before meÖ they wore their grins
Those life-like MASKS THEY WERE HIDING IN!

I know I SCARE! I know not why!
Is it the look of PASSION IN MY EYES?
Come yank my EARS! Come feel for seams!
Itís not a MASK, IíM A MAN OF DREAMS!

The one you prayed for, but youíll NEVER KNOW!
Youíre drawn to grins, and Iím a MAN OF STONE!
Stone in my stare. I am not confused!
I know what I want! And I guess itís notÖ

You look at me and you see
A view of men from ten thousand feet!
I look at you and I wonder who
You think I am to be judged byÖ
You look at me and you see
A view of men from ten thousand feet!
Try if you can just to stay my hand!
One day youíll understand that Iím a Diamond Man!

If you ever wise upÖ and stop looking for grins.
Then I will open upÖ and show you whatís within.
But you must realize that all the rules youíve learned
In your life so far will only leave you burned.

ĎCause youíve loved the dark, and you think itís light.
And you know the shadows upon first sight.
And you think those shadows that cover your eyes
Cover every man, and thatís why you despise.

But I am of the light, because I am of God.
And I see your plight. Iíd like to break the faÁade.
But thatís not within my power to do.
You need to look to Him. I know youíre not becauseÖ

You look at me and you see
A view of men from ten thousand feet!
I look at you and I wonder who
You think I am to be judged byÖ
You look at me and you see
A view of men from ten thousand feet!
Try if you can just to stay my hand!
One day youíll understand that Iím a Diamond Man!
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