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TITLE: 6FS#3-One Hundred Assassins
By David (The Goliath Assassin)
02/10/08
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This song was written several months after a pianful break-up with someone I had planned to marry. Needless to say, I was a complete wreck, and couldn't write anything for some time. The morning I wrote this, I was going back over some old poetry to try and re-capture my flare. Finally, I just SNAPPED and wrote whatever came to me. One Hundred Assassins was the result. It's not as Christian-centered as my other writes for the plain fact that I was in the early stages of rebuilding my relationship with God when I wrote it. Just know that wherever I make a statement like "on my own," I'm purely referring to the absence of a helpmate, not the absence of God.

In this poem, "assassins" are women who will stab you in your heart after getting close to you. "Goliaths" are any adversity that tries to distract your attention from God and Godly living.

~GA
Peace and love, in Christ.
My life's journey is not over yet!
I won't get sucked down into a life of regret!
I could not REALLY LIVE having NEVER KNOWN
The heights I'm capable of ON MY OWN!

But I'm still weak, true to my human design!
Independence is a state of mind!
This state of mind can be perverted, yes!
It can be converted into LONELINESS!

It is a matter of perspective, not of fact!
Logic rarely dictates how we humans act!
I'm an emotional creature down to my core!
I'm never satisfied! ALWAYS WANTING MORE!

Wanting the love I thought I had once felt!
Learning that I'll have to love myself!
Placing my efforts into something else
So when I'm at the top, I can share the wealth!

But it doubt that I can make it
All the way up to the top on my own
Unless I fight them all off
KICKIN' AND SCREAMIN'!

So I'm making my ascent!
Got a room for rent!
And I'm Hell-bent on heaven!
So if you think you can stop me now, you must be DREAMIN'!

One hundred assassins couldn't keep me down!
Yeah, one hundred assassins couldn't keep me down!
One hundred assassins couldn't keep me down!
Yeah, YOU been around? COME ON AND TAKE ME DOWN!

My life's battle is not over yet!
I won't get sucked down into a life of regret!
I could not REALLY LIVE having NEVER KNOWN
The kingdom I'm capable of on my own!

One after one, my challengers come near!
These Goliaths come full-force, inspiring fear!
But there's no obstacle that I cannot clear!
I've proved my strength with every single passing year!



David A. Johnstone Page 9 9/28/2006


It is a daily struggle to continue this fight!
One day I'll find a way to set things right!
Until then, I'll answer them with my might!
And revel in the brutality of my plight!

So I'm going to the top! There’s no stopping me now!
It would take 101 just to slow me down!
An inch-per-second and a foot-per-mile!
Stopping me is gonna' TAKE A WHILE!

And I doubt that I can make it
All the way up to the top on my own!
Unless I fight them all off
KICKIN' AND SCREAMIN'!

So I'm making my ascent!
Won't stop 'till I'm spent!
'Cause I'm Hell-bent on Heaven!
And if you think you can stop me now, you're just DREAMIN'!

ONE HUNDRED ASSASSINS COULDN'T KEEP ME DOWN!
YEAH, ONE HUNDRED ASSASSINS COULDN'T KEEP ME DOWN!
ONE HUNDRED ASSASSINS COULDN'T KEEP ME DOWN!
YEAH, YOU been around! COME ON AND TAKE ME DOWN!

One Hundred Assassins! STAY AWAY FROM ME!
One Hundred Assassins! If you know what's SAFE!
One Hundred Assassins! CANNOT CONQUER ME!
One Hundred Assassins! Speeding to their graves!
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