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TITLE: 6FS#4-Tough As NailZ (Will2Witness Remix)
By David (The Goliath Assassin)
02/10/08
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I've been transferring alot of my lyrics to the "songs" section of the critique circle, as they had recently been posted in the poetry section. But I feel that here, they'll get a little more exposure. In doing so, I've been reading back over some of the songs and have seen things that could use a bit of change. Tough As NailZ is an example of a song whose original draft needed alot of change. So does this version sound better?
There's something militant about my soul
That I have never quite figured out...
There's something buoyant about my spirit
That constantly rises above all doubt...
There's something in me that PUTS ME THROUGH THE WORST!
That something in me says it's alright...
There's something in me that WANTS MORE FROM THE WORLD
There's something in it that's just not right...

There's something in me that won't let me rest
Without knowing I serve my king...
Bringing Him to every CORNER OF THE WORLD!
Professing all that is dear to me...
There's more in here than I can ever witness
Iíve never known where it all comes from...
But there are things I believe I can imPACT!
And make them better for everyone...

I'm tough as nailz, and now I'M FULL OF THEM!
I'm tough as nailz, but GOD, THIS HURTS!
I'm tough as nailz, and now I'M FULL OF IT!
I'm tough as nailz, It could be worse...

I'm tough as nailz, But now I'M FULL OF THEM!
I'm tough as nailz, but it's alright...
I'm tough as nailz, but I heal quickly!
I'm tough as nailz! I ENJOY THE FIGHT!

There's something about you that I can't understand
Something I've pondered all of my life...
It's not your fault, and I'm AWARE OF IT!
I'm tough as nails, but I'm not bright...
There's something wrong with the world and you never
Seem to let it get to you...
There's something in you that lets you be complacent
Which is something that I CAN'T DO!

There's something in me that stirs THE OCEANS
There's something in me that ROCKS THE BOAT!
There's something in us that longs for comfort.
It's something in me that I OVERRODE!
There's something about this world that calls out
It's begging sweetly for my stand.
There's something in me that feels impassioned.
Pay more attention, and you'll understand...

I'm tough as nailz, and now I'M FULL OF THEM!
I'm tough as nailz, but LORD, IT HURTS!
I'm tough as nailz, And now I'M FULL OF IT!
I'm tough as nailz, It could be worse...

I'm tough as nailz, but now I'M FULL OF THEM!
I'm tough as nailz, but it's alright...
I'm tough as nailz, but I heal quickly!
I'm tough as nailz and I ENJOY THE FIGHT!

There's something in me thatís burning in my heart
And you won't understand 'till I show you!
There's something in the future working
Presently, and your mind will blow you!
There's someone that I am becoming!
Someone you'll know and you won't regret!
There's something POSITIVE about to HAPPEN!
Something that none of you WILL EVER FORGET!

There's something about this world that calls out
It's begging sweetly for His command!
There's something in me that feels qualified!
Just read the scriptures, and you'll understand...
I'm tough as nailz, and I do remember.
How He was nailed onto the cross!
I'm tough as nailz, and some say Iím full of it!
But His memory won't be lost!

I'm tough as nailz, but now I'M FULL OF THEM!
I'm tough as nailz, but it's ALRIGHT!
I'm tough as nailz, but now I'M FULL OF IT!
I'VE HAD ENOUGH, AND I WILL SET THINGS RIGHT!

I'm tough as nailz, and now I'M FULL OF THEM!
I'm tough as nailz, so watch for me!
I'm tough as nailz, and I AM NOT STOPPING!
PUT DOWN YOUR NAILS AND WATCH MY SPIRIT BLEED!

Put down your nails and watch my spirit
BLEEEEEEED!
Put down your nails and watch my spirit
BLEEEEEEED!
Put down your nails and watch my spirit
BLEEEEEEED!
Put down your nails and WATCH MY SPIRIT BLEED!
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