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TITLE: From Mom and Daddy's Baby to Mom and Daddy's Young Lady
By gene hudgens
12/27/07
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teens and young adults
From Mom and Daddyís Baby to Mom and Daddyís Young Lady

Carnations are white and they can be tinted blue
Candy is always sweet and so are you
If Jack and Jill went up a hill to fetch a pale of water
Mom and I will climb any mountain for our daughter

Oh I remember when Mom and I brought you home one day
You are so very tiny and can only on your cot lay
But soon comes the day when you hold your bottle in your hand
My oh my, you are the cutest baby in all the land

So quickly you grow restless lying on your back
You never enjoy wearing socks or having your feet in a sack
You are so happy when you learn to turn on your tummy
With your head held up you always want to watch Mommy

One day when I came home and heard you giggle as you tried to stand
And when you have success you are the proudest girl in all the land
I pick you up and give you a big kiss
Hold you high and call you my little Miss

I remember the day when we finally give in and sit you on the floor
In no time at all we have to find a way to block the door
For a while you crawl, but for you this isnít fun
So you quickly start walking and soon learn to run

You really love to go outside and play in the sand
And by summerís end you have a beautiful tan
You always like to walk with Mom and me on a hike
But the most fun for you is when you can ride your bike

A few years fly by and suddenly itís time for school
Mom is concerned, but you think the first day is cool
You tell Mom some of the kids are too loud
But all in all you really love the crowd

Youíre our darling, but in school you pickup every trend
With bubble-gum and nose picking we just canít grin
Thank goodness this is only a stage that doesnít last too long
In a year or so it seems you are singing a different song.

You are soon telling your brother that heís always too loud
And heís yelling that you have your head in a cloud
You spend so much time as you pace and groom
That we must make an appointment to use the bathroom

Sometimes youíre edgy and will start a fuss on a dare
Canít pass a mirror without redoing your hair
Now all of your clothes are too loose or too tight
Those that do fit are either too dark or too light

You recently give your brother all of your toys and your bike
Now itís more fun with the boys to go on a hike
Your dress as always shows good taste,
But now is more sporty with very little lace

Itís true that wisdom comes with age
And is developed just a little in each stage
Old sayings are not just words that you hear
They are another form of wisdom that can grow each year

Your hair style now is perfection, but without a curl
Mom and I realize youíre now a young lady and not our little girl
Weíre very proud that you really did hear
Some old sayings we passed on year after year

Mom and I try hard to show that we love you day and night
It makes us both smile when you come to us with each joy and each plight
When we ask you where you will go, itís only our way to say we truly care
We just love you and donít want anything to happen to a single hair

It makes Mom and me smile when you describe every boy you date
The way you set us at ease as you promise not to be too late
Youíre a wonderful young lady that never needs to be cunning
And your sheer honesty makes you very stunning

We feel certain that when you meet the right boy
Youíll win his trust and love without any ploy
You have made Mom and me want to yell to the world out loud
That you are our delicate lady and you make us so very proud.
© Gene Hudgens
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