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Adventures of Ron Huckleberry...#7-1 Trapped on the barn-loaf beam
Ron was awake early and it was a beautiful day. He had spent the night at Grandmother’s house, because Auntie wasn’t feeling well.
Soon after breakfast Ron was out side looking for something new to do as he entertained himself. He told Grandmother that he would like to go to the creek and watch the frogs and turtles. “You be careful.” she reminded him.
Ron had to cross the highway to get to the creek and he normally cut across Mr. Jenkins’s field to reach the creek. This morning, for reason, he decided to take a look in side Mr. Jenkins large barn. Although Mr. Jenkins no longer farmed, he had retained his barn, which was near the back of his house. He made some extra money by renting out space in the huge barn for others to store their farm equipment.
The doors were never locked and Ron was soon inside looking around. There were two hay loafs which were full of hay. Naturally he was soon climbing a ladder to explore these hay lofts. He immediately disturbed a sleeping cat and some chickens that were probably ready to lay eggs.
Anyway Ron roamed through both hay lofts before he noticed some strange looking bird nests stuck high on the walls almost near the roof. The nests looked like they were made of mud, so he naturally had to have a closer look. From the lofts he could not reach them and even when standing on the tallest farm machinery he still couldn’t get close.
He noticed that the barn had several thick wooden beams that ran from one side of the barn to the other side. He realized that if he could get onto a beam he could scoot right up next to one of the nests.
The question now is how to get onto that particular beam. He saw a ladder leaning against the wall. After examining the situation he decided that if could take the ladder on top of the piece of farm machinery nearest the beam he could place the ladder so he could climb to the beam.
Getting the ladder atop the machine was not difficult. He then placed the bottom of the ladder against the metal seat and then braced the top of the ladder against the large beam. This was easy too and climbing up the ladder was also easy. However, as he carefully moved from the ladder onto the beam, the ladder slipped away from the beam and fell to the ground.
Ron was excited about being on the beam and was thinking about looking into the bird nest. At the moment he did not think about the fallen ladder.
He carefully and slowly scooted his bottom along the beam until he was next to the wall and could see clearly into the nest. He saw some eggs, but no little birds. His curiosity was solved, so he scooted back to where the ladder had been. Suddenly he realized he could not get down from the beam.
Ron was scared. He was thinking that Granddaddy might just spank him good for being so dumb. He sat there looking in every direction, but there was no way down…and it was a long ways down to the floor.
Ron did yell that he needed help, but naturally no one heard him. Luckily, after about fifteen minutes (which seemed like hours), a farm worker entered the barn to get some kind of machine.
When the worker heard Ron calling and looked up he began to laugh. Mr. Ron, I see you are at it again. I’d better get you down before your aunt or grandmother finds out what you did this time.
In short order Ron was safely on the ground. “Thanks Mr. Jimmy.” Ron said.
“Don’t worry, I won’t say anything, but please be more careful in the future.” Mr. Jimmy remarked, as they both left the barn.
© GENE HUDGENS
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