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TITLE: The Eyes Of Nathan
By David (The Goliath Assassin)
09/22/07
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The tempo of this song swings violently from heavy metal verses to slower, more melodic choruses. I wanted to expand my writing in a more vulnerable capacity, while still maintaining the empassioned feel I'm comfortable with.

I've been wanting a solid answer on this question: Is the writer gaining more of the readers' confidence (through humility) in the statement: "I'm not the King Of Kings! The perfect life is well beyond my power," or is he losing more confidence (through his honesty) by stating: "I am not to be trusted alone?"
I set those statements up to oppose each other, and I want to know which one (if either) wins out in the end.

Assume this is a close friend of yours. Do you feel better about the guy having read this, or do you feel like you wish you didn't know this about him?
King David… AT HIS WORST!
Cold as stone… arrogant in his POWER!
Not one complaint… ever filed!
Not one protest… was ever lodged!

Who would dare… speak up against the king?
Who would stand… in the path of his passion?
I know well… the fault was his!
But her failure to resist made David’s own sin possible!

I’m not the King of Kings! The perfect life is well beyond my power!
I cannot redeem myself when I am in my darkest hour!
I’ll accept the test. I’ll always do my best, lest I turn sour.
But I can’t promise you that I will never fail…

Someone faithful, please keep your loving watch over me.
I am not to be trusted alone.
Someone faithful, please wrap your saving arms around me.
I don’t want to be as cold and hard as stone!

(This son of David’s got his eyes on the daughters of Nathan…)

King David… MURDERER!
No pity… Showed utter contempt for the Lord!
Not one complaint… ever filed.
Not one protest… was EVER LODGED!
Who would dare… speak up against the king?
Who would stand… in the path of his contempt?
I know well… the fault was his!
But their failure as a nation made his failure possible!

I’m not the King of Kings! The perfect life is well beyond my power!
I cannot redeem myself when I am in my darkest hour!
I’ll accept the test. I’ll always do my best, lest I turn sour.
But I can’t promise you that I will never fail…

Someone faithful, please keep your selfless watch over me.
I am not to be trusted alone.
Someone faithful, please wrap your knowing arm around me.
I don’t want to be as cold and hard as stone!

(This son of David’s counting on the sons of Nathan…)

Tragedy! That it took…
His darkest hour… to bring out his finest moment!
Man after… God’s own heart!
Humbled now… “I have sinned against the Lord!”
I don’t need… To live this!
I read it… That should be enough!
I’m not dumb… But I’m not WISE!
Please watch me… With faithful eyes!

I’m not the King of Kings! The perfect life is well beyond my power!
I cannot redeem myself when I am in my darkest hour!
I’ll accept the test. I’ll always do my best, lest I turn sour.
But I can’t promise you that I will never fail…

(This son of David’s asking for the eyes of Nathan…)
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