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TITLE: It Sounds Serious
By Marilyn Klunder
08/07/07
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A story for children 6 to 8 years old
“Did you hear that?” Hayden asked.

“What?” Lauren asked without looking up from her toys.

“Mom said Uncle Ryan has menolisurthay!”

“What’s that?” Lauren asked.

“I don’t know but it sounds serious. Do you think he’s going to die?” Hayden asked.

“I don’t even know what it is,” Lauren exclaimed.

“Maybe we should ask someone,” Hayden said.

“But who?” Lauren asked.

“Let’s ask Micky,” Hayden said.

Both Lauren and Hayden got up from where they were playing and went to find Micky. Micky was their cousin and he was just a year older than them, but he was pretty smart.

Micky was outside riding his bike. “Micky,” Hayden yelled. “We need to ask you something.”

“Yeah. Do you know what minalurthay is? Lauren asked.

“Huhhhh! Where did you hear that?” Micky asked.

“That’s what Mom said Uncle Ryan has,” Lauren said.

“Is he going to die?” Hayden asked.

“No, but he’s in lots of trouble,” Micky said.

“How much trouble?” Lauren asked.

“I don’t know. We’ll ask Katherine. She’ll know,” Micky said.

Katherine was Micky’s sister and she was just a year older than him, but she was pretty smart.

They found Katherine playing with her dolls on the front porch. “Katherine, do you know what minuralthasis is?" Micky asked.

“Of course I do. I’m older than you aren’t I?” Katherine said.

“Well, what is it?" Micky asked.

“It’s a disease you get from eating to many apples.” Katherine said.

“Is he going to die?” Lauren asked.

“No, but he should probably see a doctor and get a shot for it,” Katherine said.

“What kind of shot?” Hayded asked.

“I don’t know. We’ll have to ask someone. I know, we’ll ask Brenda. She’s in the third grade now.” Katherine said.

All four of the children marched across the street to where Brenda lived. Katherine knocked on the door. Brenda's Mom opened the door.

“Is Brenda home, Mrs. Short? We’d like to talk to her.” Katherine said.

“Yes, she is in the back yard playing in the pool. Just go around to the back and you’ll find her.” Mrs. Short said.

Hayden, Lauren, Micky and Katherine walked around to the backyard and sure enough, Brenda was playing in the pool.

“Brenda, we want to ask you something. Do you know what maneralisis is?” Katherine asked.

“Everyone knows what maneralisisay is,” Brenda exclaimed.

“Well, can you tell us?” Katherine asked.

“Everyone knows that it's something you get when you get married,” Brenda said.

“Uncle Ryan’s not married?” Hayden asked.

“Oh. I don’t know then. Maybe we’ll have to ask someone else. I know we’ll ask Jason.” Brenda, Katherine, Micky, Hayden and Lauren all left Brenda’s house and walked down the sidewalk toward Jason’s house. As they turned the corner they ran straight into Hayden and Lauren’s mom.

“What are all of you up to?” She asked.

“We’re going to ask Jason a question,” Lauren replied.

“What kind of question?” She asked.

“We want to know what maneroflisursay is,” Hayden replied.

“Manerof….what?” She asked.

“Yeah, you said Uncle Ryan had it,” Lauren said.

“Is he going to die?” Hayden asked.

Hayden and Lauren’s mom started laughing. “What I said is Uncle Ryan is a man of leisure these days. He’s on vacation and has nothing to do. In fact he’s coming over to take you to the park.”

"Yippee!" Hayden yelled and Lauren clapped her hands and everyone started to laugh.


Sometimes our ears hear words we don’t understand and when we repeat words we don’t understand to others, the words begin to change. Instead of the simple meaning it began with, it could turn into something more serious. Be careful when repeating others’ words. It could save you a lot of misunderstanding.
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