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TITLE: Hope And Scars
By David (The Goliath Assassin)
05/09/07
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As far as the tone, this is just a straight-forward metal rant! One of my buddies heard the recording of me screaming my head off to "HOPE AND SCARS!" He thought I was saying "Open scars." I turned to him and said, "Well, that's prettymuch what my throat felt like!"

The lyrics flow from heartache to financial strain. Seem odd? Not if you're aware that surveys indicate that as much as ninety percent of fights between married couples somehow trace back to money problems. Usually, the lack of. (In other words, they're not fighting over which charity to give the left-over cashflow away to!)
There is NO HOPE LEFT in a TROUBLED LAND
When a WOMAN’S EYES CHANGE WITH THE TIDE!
When a MAN WHO ONCE FOUGHT in the name of a PURPOSE
Trades in his PASSION and fights for PRIDE!

‘Tis a HOPELESS LAND we are LIVING IN BROTHERS!
When no woman takes int’rest in VALOROUS SONS!
When her train-ed eyes seek out only the GLORY
Of a battle already FOUGHT AND WON!

But where-so-ever a GOOD WOMAN WALKETH
I promise you BROTHERS ONE THING!
She WILL NOT be amused by the glory you SPEAK OF!
She measures a man BY THE SWORD WHICH HE SWINGS!

There is HOPE when an honest soul judges with wisdom
The IDEAS WRITTEN ON A PAGE!
And there’s HOPE when a medium exists
To help lonely souls REACH OUT and freely EXCHANGE!

There is HOPE when a woman will take the time
To ANSWER MY NEED TO BE HEARD!
There is HOPE when a book’s not judged just by its COVER
But by the IMAGES PUT DOWN IN WORDS!

There is HOPE when two people don’t simply stop learning
And BETTERING THE PEOPLE THEY ARE!
When the only guarantee is: “Tomorrow will be better!”
We’ll CHART OUR COURSES BY THE SAME STAR!

Sometimes when I study the others around me
I realize that they have it ROUGH!
And I’m thankful for my relationship with the Father
Who teaches me how to stand TOUGH!

This life isn’t easy by any means, honestly
AND IF THAT WERE NOT ENOUGH…
Most of us make it harder on each other
By living our lives CHASING “JUST-US!”

We don’t wanna’ FEEL THE PAIN!
We don’t wanna’ TRY TO CHANGE!
We just wonder WHY CAN’T THINGS JUST STAY THE SAME?

But to show us WHAT WE WAAANT
And teach us WHO WE AAARE
He tells us WHAT WE NEEED IS HOPE AND SCARS!

There is NO HOPE LEFT in a TROUBLED LAND
When a man can’t SUPPORT A HOUSE ON HIS OWN!
Or when he can, but only because THERE’S JUST ONE of him
And he’s GOT NO AFFECTION FOR CHROME!

‘Cuz the wrought-iron truth about America these days
Is NOBODY’S PAID WHAT THEY’RE WORTH!
How can we truly attach a DOLLAR AMOUNT
To the GREATNESS GOD HAS PUT IN US FROM BIRTH?

We have dropped the ball lately on leadership
In America, as a nation-ON THE WHOLE!
And the blame falls securely on NO ONE MAN
Still, the BURDON WEIGHS DOWN on the AMERICAN SOUL!

But there’s HOPE when good people will band together
TO MAKE A CHANGE FOR THE BETTER!
When the POWER OF HEART is put FIRST FROM THE START
To educate the AVERAGE DEBTOR!

So much bondage is suffered in our nation today
It’s called CONSENTUAL SLAVERY!
But there’s HOPE when my best friends, my businessmen
Agree that ONE-AND-FOR-ALL, WE’LL PAY THE FEE!

And there’s HOPE when the leaders I follow believe
IN THE VALUES MY FOREFATHERS DID!
And there’s HOPE when they speak to the morals
MY MOTHER RAISED ME ON WHEN I WAS A KID!


Sometimes when I study the others around me
I realize that they have it ROUGH!
And I’m thankful for my relationship with the Father
Who teaches me how to stand TOUGH!

This life isn’t easy by any means, honestly
AND IF ALL THAT WERE NOT ENOUGH…
Most of us make it harder on each other
By living our lives CHASING “JUST-US!”

We don’t wanna’ TRY TO CHANGE!
We just want to STAY THE SAME!
We just wonder WHY DOES LIFE BRING SO MUCH PAIN?

To show us WHAT WE WAAANT
And teach us WHO WE AAARE
He tells us WHAT WE NEEED IS HOPE AND SCARS!

(Until the pain of staying the same… becomes greater than the pain of change…)

We just wanna’ STAY THE SAME!
We don’t want to FEEL THE PAIN!
We just wonder GOD, WHY SHOULD I HAVE TO CHANGE?

To show us WHAT WE WAAANT
And teach us WHO WE AAARE
He tells us WHAT WE NEEED IS HOPE AND SCARS!
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