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TITLE: Little boy and his adventure to the Planet Warm
By Renee McKee
01/01/07
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There was a little boy who wanted to go out side and play but is mother would not let him. She said,"Tommy it is to cold out there today, maybe tommorow." Tommy did not put up a fight or argue with his mother he jsut said, "Yes, mother your right.
As he went up to his room,he wandered about a warm place to play. He wanted to be able to go outside with out having to ware so much clothes because it was so cold.
When Tommy got to his room he closed the door and stared playing. Next thing he knew, he was in this warm place. He could not believe how warm these place was. He called this place The Planet Warm. Because it was so warm that you did not need a shirt on or shoes, or gloves, or hat, or scraf, or a coat. All you need to wear is sun block and a pair of shorts. Tommy did not want this place to end. He had never seen very tall trees that touched the deep blue sky. The sand was sprakly with little white shells. Tommy was just in awe of this planet he just set down to feel the warm sand under neath is feet and head. He never flet the sun that warm before. He has never seen sand or felt the warmth of this place before. Because where he lived it was always cold. He wanted to stay forever and ever.
Tommy liked this planet because he could play outside with out it being so, cold. He ran for hours with no shoes on. He liked the way the sand felt between his toes. He loved the warm air against his face. He wanted to stay there forever.

He laid down on the sand and closed his eyes just for a few seconds he did not want to lose this moment. Then all of a sudden he heard a voice in the distance calling his name, but he could not see that person. Who was calling him? The voice sounded filimar to him. Who could it be? It was his mother calling him to eat. She called out again and he woke up shivering and wanting to go back to that warm place.
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