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Target audience young readers.
Penelope
And the LMNOPs
by Professor Goodheart, 2006
wordcount: 645
All is abuzz in Mrs. Gaboozles’ home room
Oh, it seems Penelope’s been at it again.
Mrs. Gaboozle can’t teach the alphabet,
With all of the letters but N!
Mr. Cecil B. Crumbly is missing even more letters
As he tries to teach his ABC’s
You can’t spell “noodle” or “poodle” or even “fiddle-dee-doodle”,
Without the LMNO’s or P’s.
PENELOPE!!!!!!!!!!!!
Cried the teachers with frustration…
For they knew she was responsible somehow
Where did you hide all the LMNOP’s?
PLEASE BRING THEM BACK HERE RIGHT NOW!
Well, Penelope fought to hold in her giggles,
As she ran out the door, down the stairs.
Her bag so full of all of the letters
They dropped out of her knapsack in pairs.
Now, without LMN’s, O’s, or P’s
Many things started to erase
To Penelope’s surprise
Things popped out of sight,
And a look of great fear filled her face.
All around her, things “Poppled” and “Fizzed”
And “Whiffled” and “Ziffed”
Right out of sight they quickly disappeared!
What a Fazoozle, cried Mrs. Gaboozle,
it is worse than what we had feared!
“Poof” went Linda’s lovely Pajamas
“Whiff”went Farmer Lackaby’s Llamas
With a very loud Pop!
Nana’s cupboards were bare
And her and her yummy gumdrops
Were nowhere,
not here, and
not there…
OH DEAR, cried Penelope.
OH MY OH DEAR!
What else, I pray, will disappear?
At Mr. Yoki’s store,
things disappeared from the shelves galore
“Ziff” went the lemons, mangos, and melons
“Whiff’ went the bananas pickles and pears.
Poor Mr. Yoki, riddled with grief
scratched his head with disbelief
Boy was he shocked and scared!
With a “Zip” and a “Zap” at the Piggledy Zoo,
as the animals were doing what they dooly-doo-do,
The pigs and monkeys were manic
And started to snort, shriek and panic,
As they began to disappear too!
OH DEAR, cried Penelope.
OH MY, OH GEE
what would the world be without the letters
LMN or P?
No Peanut Butter Sundae’s.
No Movies or Mondays…
Say good-bye to the Man on the Moon…
Hmmmmmm
All of a sudden, in great surprise
Penelope’s face turned ghostly white
and with a growing look of fear in her eyes....
she shrieked:
“WITHOUT LMNOP’s,
THERE WOULD BE NO PENELOPES!”
Penelope cried, and felt all empty inside.
She found herself afraid and all alone.
She created a cunundrum of trouble
By taking what wasn’t her own.
Penelope knew
There was only one thing to do
Before she herself dissipated
She ran and ran
Back to the school
To right the great wrong she created.
“I’m soooo sorry” Cried Penelope.
“I’ve been a very bad girl, and a fool!
I’ve taken all the LMN’s, Os and Ps
Please help me bring them back to the school!”
So, Mrs. Gaboozle,
with faith and forgiveness and the
loveliest of teacherly grace, said,
“With your apology, and by the tears on your face,
I can see that you’ve learned your lesson,
Miss Penelope
To make it better you must race to replace,
Each and every L, M, N, O, and P”
With not a minute to spare
With Miss Gaboozle still there
She reached the last letter up high.
And…….
“whoosh” back came the llamas, tall and proud.
“Kabam”, in crashed in the monkeys, monkeying around.
“Pop” in-came Mr. Yoki’s mangos, melons, and pears
He smiled a huge smile
as he watched his licorice and lemons
and his popsicles and pickles re-appear.
Nana’s yummy gumdrops,
The Man on the Moon
The Noodles, Fiddle-dee-doodles,
Farmer Lackaby’s llamas, and
Lynda’s Lovely Pajamas.
All reappeared in their usual places
And what Penelope learned was most important to reappear
was not the things or the stuff or the places…
“What I liked best”, said Penelope
“By being good, saying sorry, and making things right,
I saw smiles come back to your faces!!!!”
Professor Goodheart, 2006
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