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Written for children of a wide age variety. It represents how our flaws drag us down, but how they can be traded for Jesus' new nature
3 friends are wondering aimlessly from nowhere to nowhere with heavy burdens tied to their feet (anger, fear, depression). Each has a rock tied to them symbolizing their fault and itís weighing them down Enter a girl headed to a party with only a balloon to carry.
Anger: Címon man!!?? What are you doing??!!
Depression: Iím so depressed, I canít go on, I just feel this
weight holding me back
Fear: Ok, letís just stop here. Iím a little bit scared. This rock is following me and I donít know where it came from.
Anger: You guys are so annoying! I wanna get there already and Iím sick & tired of being lost
Depression: Well, whatís the big hurry anyway? You get angry about everything. Am I not good enough to make you proud?
Fear: Where are we going?
Anger: Somewhere. Anywhere.
Depression: Weíre going nowhere.
Fear: (breaks into tears)
Anger: Dude! You made him cry!
Depression: Great. One more thing to be depressed about.
Fear: Iím so scared! So scared!
Depression & Anger: (to depression) Shut up!!
Anger: You know, if you wouldnít keep stopping to moap, we wouldnít be lost anyway
Depression: What?! Weíve been lost since we came fromÖwhere did we come from?
Fear: (still crying) NOWHERE!!
Anger & Depression: Oh yeah
Anger: (to depression) Well?
Anger: Read the map or something (gives the map to him). Iím not gonna do everything, you know
Depression: Ií not good at mapsÖIím not good at anything. Do you wanna make me more depressed than I already am? (burries his face in his hands)
Anger: Ugh! (takes map from him) Look, we came out ofÖwhere is it?
Depression: No where, itís off the map, remember. Itís hopeless
(Fear starts to want to go to the bathroom)
Anger: Your depression is gonna make me blow a vessel. Look.
(points at the map)
Fear: GuysÖ(they keep looking at map) ProblemÖBig Problem.
Fear: The chilly dog. Gotta-Go-Bathroom!
Depression: Where did you get a chilly dog?
Fear: (points at someone from audience)
Depression: (looks at the person Fear pointed to) Am I not good
enough for a chilly dog? Why? Why???!!!
Anger: Whatever. Go find a tree.
Fear: (just stands there)
Depression: I want to move. My heart is too heavy
Fear: (to anger) Come with me?
Anger: Are you stupid or something! No way!
Fear: Oh please! Please!! There could be a bear or a lion or a monkey! Please, please, please.
Depression: I know how you feel. Itís tragic. Iíll go
Anger: And leave me here? Yeah right.
Fear: Letís all go together.
Depression: Yes, lets. (they begin to drag their rocks in an awkward way)
(in walks girl with balloon)
Happy: Woohoo! Yeeeeee! Yeehaw!! (As she plays)
Fear: (hides behind depression)
Anger: Who are you? What are you doing here? Get out of our space.
Happy: sorryÖwhatís that? (about the rocks)
Depression: Our big heavy burdens. We canít go on!
Fear: (the whole time awestruck & fearing the balloon) And that?
Happy: Oh, thatís my burden
Anger: Is it heavy
Happy: Nah. It floats! (She pulls it down in front of them & lets them watch it float, fear freaks out; all are amazed) Iím going to a party, You wanna come?
Depression: Do we need one of those to go?
Anger: Hook us up?
Happy: Sure! First take these off. (with fear, helps him) Itís ok
(Fear is feeling good; the others watch & take it off themselves)
All: WoW! Feels good, my feet are so light, I can jump around
Happy: It gets better. (gives them a balloon) Here. (all start
playing with balloons) Are you ready?
Fear: Iím not scared anymore!!
Depression: Wow! A Party! How Exciting
Anger: Group Hug!!
All: Awwww(they begin to exit)
Fear: (off stage) I still have to go to the bathroom
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