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TITLE: Falling Heart
By Pam Williams
12/13/04
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I wanted to submit this to the writing challenge on Romance but missed the deadline because I wanted to spend more time editing this poem. I questioned myself on whether or not this was romance. Probably not. It is more of a broken heart love poem. I have written this reflecting on Pablo Neruda's work -- even though I have just begun my writing journey.

"Tonight I can write the saddest lines." Pablo Neruda
Falling Heart

Why do you leave me in sorrow?
Why do you abandon my heart?

For in the moment you walk away
My heart weakens and blood
Flows through me like sand
Through an hourglass.
One by one cells fall away
Mourning the absence of you.
Each heart valve opens to find you
But only closes an empty chamber.

Why do you leave me thirsty,
So dry in the burning sun?
No breath of you in my lungs,
No hand to hold or voice to fill my ears,
And my eyes only find empty space,
No sight worth seeing without you.

Please donít suffer my heart!
If you would only stay so my heart
Can rise through the fullness of you.
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