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TITLE: Layers
By Kurt Youngdale
03/29/06
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I dont take a stab at poetry often. If anyone actually reads through the whole thing, let me know what you think.

Thanks
The day breaks over the curve of the earth
another chance to do something with my life

what should I Do?
Do anything you like but dont do anything I wouldn't do
that doesn't help much

you need to get up because you might be late
why should I care if I'm late?

You might get in trouble if your late
why should I care if I get in trouble?
If you get in trouble your prestige will drop

I dont have very much prestige now
So you cant afford to lose any

I realize I have to get up
I wish for once I could stay in bed and not get up
I can't because I care too much or maybe I'm scared

Why should you be scared?
Something unpleasant might happen
fear is your problem
I know it is

I do my duty and go to work
you are very dutiful, you should be very proud of yourself
I do not like sarcasm

that is too bad, I will cry for you
Who will appreciate all my hard work?
Now you know the answer to that question
I want to hear you say it
I will not say it

They do not pay me the respect I deserve
Do they owe you respect?
yes, they do
They will not pay it

I am angry
Why are you angry?
because they will not pay me respect
is that a good reason to be angry?
yes, it is
that is too bad, I will cry for you

I do not want you to cry for me
why do you not want me to cry for you?
because pity is an insult
Do you think that I insult you?
yes, you are insulting me
I am not insulting you

I feel pain
of course you do
I am not appreciated
of course your not
What should I do now?
give me your pain
why should I do that?
so you dont feel it anymore
will you feel it for me?
yes, I will

What about the things that made me feel pain?
give those things to me
why should I do that?
So I can change them
How can I trust you?
Have I done everything I said I would do?
Yes
Then will you trust me?
Yes
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