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TITLE: The New Babies- story 3
By Karie Spiller
02/16/06
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This is another continuation on the first two. Please critique them for me.
“Mommy,” Angela yelled as she came running into the babies’ room. “Angela sweetie, please don’t run or yell in the house,” Mommy said. “Okay, but Mommy can you read me a story?” Angela asked as she help up her favorite storybook. “Not right now sweetie, I am busy with the twins. I’ll read you a story after they are sleeping,” Mommy said. “But Mommy, I am really bored,” Angela said. “I’m sorry sweetie, but I have to give the twins their bottles and rock them to sleep,” Mommy said. “That will take forever,” Angela said. “No it won’t and I promise after I get them to sleep I will read to you,” Mommy said. Angela stomped out of the room and slammed the door behind her. “Young lady, you do not slam doors and stomp around. I want you to change your attitude right now,” Mommy said. “Okay,” Angela said as she went into her room.

Angela laid down on her bed. She was still mad at Mommy. She picked up her teddy bear and hugged him. “Teddy, I don’t like having the babies here anymore. Mommy never has time for me anymore and I don’t like it,” Angela said. After a few more minutes angela went into the babies room again. Mommy was still rocking Samuel. “Mommy aren’t you done yet,” she said. “No honey not yet. Go outside and play for a while. Mommy will be with you very soon,” Mommy said. Angela went out to swing in the backyard.

A little while later Mommy came outside with Angela’s storybook. “Come on sweetie, Mommy can read to you now,” she said. Just then the babies cried. Mommy put the book down and went to them. Angela followed carrying the storybook. “But Mommy, you promised,” she said. “Honey, I have to take care of the babies. I’ll read to you later,” Mommy said. “It’s always the babies. Why do you have to be with them all the time. All they do is cry and eat and mess their diapers. I wish they hadn’t been born,” Angela said as she slammed the door to her room. She laid across her bed and cried. “I think Mommy likes Sarah and Samuel more than me,” she said to herself. She cried some more, but pretty soon she got hungry and went into the living room.

Mommy was sitting in her rocking chair, sewing. “Well look who is here to join me. I thought you didn’t want to see me anymore,” Mommy said holding out her arms for a hug. Angela went over to Mommy and said, “Mommy do you love Sarah and Samuel more than me?” she asked. “Of course not sweetie. Mommy loves you very much, but sometimes Mommy has to take care of the babies. They can’t do some of the things you can do. They can’t tell me when they are hungry or thirsty and they can’t use the potty like a big girl like you can. Babies need a lot of caring for and sometimes Mommy can’t do what you want when you want it,” Mommy said. “Mommy I’m sorry that I got mad at you and the babies. I do love them, but sometimes I wish that they wouldn’t need you so much,” Angela said. “Well they are asleep and they don’t need me now. Why don’t you go get your storybook and Mommy will read to you,” Mommy said. “Okay, Mommy,” Angela said.

Angela was just settling down on Mommy’s lap for her story when Samuel started to cry. Mommy got up and walked to the babies’ room. Angela put down the book and followed Mommy. Mommy was changing Samuel’s diaper. Sarah was up too, so Angela picked up her rattle and went over to her crib. “Hi Sarah,” she said as she shook the rattle for Sarah. Mommy is busy right now, but she will be here in a minute.” Baby Sarah looked up at Angela and smiled. Mommy smiled too, because Angela was being a big helper.
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