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TITLE: Alex Helps At the Store
By Andria Cook
11/25/05
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This is part of a series that is coming out that will be customized with the child's name in place of Alex. Target age 3-6

Any feedback would be appreciated.
Alex Helps at the Store

Alex sits by his mom on the floor “I wrote you a book, about going to the store.”

"I would love to hear you read, what does the book say?”

"It says I went to the store with my mom today!
I picked out the buggy, and pushed it for mom
She didn’t even complain because I took too long.
I got the box of cereal off of the shelf.
And then I put it in the buggy all by myself!
I listened closely, and followed the rules well,
And I picked up the mess I made, when all the cans fell.
I felt so embarrassed; it was just a mistake,
When I knocked over the display, and made a juice lake.
Mom wasn’t angry, she just called for help.
And when I hit her foot with the buggy, she didn’t even yelp!
I was careful with the eggs, so they didn’t break.
Then I picked out cookies for mom and me to bake.
I picked out some bananas, apples and grapes.
Mom says I eat more bananas than the apes!
I am a big helper at the store
I wish mom would take me there more.
Mom always gives a big smile at the end
And hands me my very own money to spend
“Alex, not yet, it is not time to play,
Stand still in the line and wait to pay.”
I picked out some candy, my favorite kind
The lady smiled, and said, that will be $1.09.
As I counted slowly, and put it in her hand
Mom finished in the next isle and got the sacks from the man.
He said I was a big helper, and I could come back,
Mom says it will be at least a week before she’s ready for that.
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