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TITLE: Moaning Mona...
By Judith Gayle Smith
11/02/04
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Ever wonder what was behind that enigmatic smile of Mona Lisa?
***At Mona's - the 'phone rings***
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Leonardo: "Hey Mona! It's Leo! C'mon over and help me paint in the kitchen!"

Mona: "GOOD GRIEF! Doggone it all, Leo - I have a HOT date and I want to look "kickin'"!"


Leonardo: "Aw Mona - you are always worrying about time! You always look okay to me."

Mona: "It is three o-clock already! He'll be here at seven!"


Leonardo: "So what's the complaint? I'll have you outta here by six - Plenty of time!"

Mona: "Grrrrrrr. What are you painting in the kitchen anyway?


Leonardo: "You'll know when we're done. Who ya goin' out with tonight?"

Mona: "I'll tell you when you need to know."


Leonardo: "So whatcha been doing all day?"

Mona: "Trying new make-up and hair techniques..."


Leonardo: "Still watching those dumb, gaudy makeover shows on TV?"

Mona: "You're a man. You wouldn't understand."

Leonardo: "Well, the sooner you get here, the sooner you're outta here!"

Mona: sigh. "I'll be right over!"


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***At Leo's pad***
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Leonardo: "What have you done to your hair? What's that stuff all over your face?

Mona: "Doncha like it? Everybody's doing it."


Leonardo: "Go wash that junk outta your hair, Wash your face!

Mona: "You don't like me? I really played up my best features. Like I said - I have a really hot date!"


Leonardo: "You look like a tramp. A clown! Off with it! Your "hot" date won't like it either."

Mona: "How would YOU know!"


Leonardo: "It's a man thing. Go SCRUB!"

Mona: "Why does it bother you so much? I can paint . . ."


Leonardo: "Maybe YOU can, but I CAN'T! Not with you BLINDING me like this!"

Mona: "Okay - but you owe me big time."

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***In Leo's bathroom***
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Mona: "Grumble. So FUSSY! What do I see in the man? Wanted to make him jealous. "Hot date" tonight. Thought he'd rise to the bait. Man has no feelings whatsoever. Glad this hair stuff rinses out. All that work! Well - at least he NOTICED me for a change..."

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***Back in Leo's kitchen***
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Leonardo: "That's MUCH better! Now we can get to work."

Mona: "I am SO happy you are so pleased. Grumble. Grumble."


Leonardo: "You know, Mon - when the sunlight catches your hair like that . . ."

Mona. "Oh, DON'T waste my time with gibberish. I'll take that as a thank you."


Leonardo: "Ready to paint?"

Mona: "As ready as I'll ever be. Watcha paintin'?"


Leonardo: "The woman I love."
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