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TITLE: Abandoned
By Mike Shoemake
04/23/12
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I know we said "Til death do us part",
And yet you don't seem to be around.
I search for you and find emptiness,
I light a candle in the dark
but the wind blows it out.
Like a child, I call out to you
While the darkness laughs at me.

Where did you go?
What did I do?
What do I do... now?

Like a child. Abandoned.
Is God laughing too?
I can't look Him in the eye.
My failure is my shame.
Alone. I am truly alone.
How do I go on?

I know I am alone by choice.
I choose not to turn around
And run into arms outstretched.
I hear Him calling but still it feels
like laughter to me on the inside.
Maybe because I am laughing at myself.

Unready to face my Father,
I simply lean back against Him.
I feel the warmth and power
Of His embrace.
Finally, I rest.

How do I grow?
How do I know the path?
I rest for almost an eternity.
Patiently He waits for me.
I light a candle in the dark
but the wind blows it out.
I light it again,
And chastise the wind.

This time I refuse to take no for an answer.

Finally, I turn and face Him.
I see the light of His smile.
I am hurt, but He will heal.
I am lost, but He will guide me.
The pain stays. But, so does He.
And, He is more than enough.
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