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TITLE: Mouth of the Sea
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08/09/09
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I guess I got really lost this is poem. I had planned something entirely different, but ended up with this. I like the ending. Most of it is smooth, but i think in some places its a little rough...
Mouth of the Sea

Under the black seas
And below violent turbulents
The oceansí slapping, slapping
Up against your knees.
Excitedly, enthused the rhyming
Waves lap up you with
a calming respite.
You look out at the horizon,
A storm of black clouds
Threaten with rage.
Evoking the crashing sea,
You dare to take a step in.
The waves are frigid
Slopping against your toes.
Looking out again, the angry
Sky turns green and red
With disgust at your face.
Horrified you step back,
Out of the aggravated sea.
Making your way back
You trek towards home
Where everything is safe and dry.
Inside you feel calm and warm.
As if there is a beam
Glowing, emanating out
of your soul. And this safeness
and security you feel is
enlightening. A fire inside you
crackles and pops, but the
storm outside your rages.
Howling baroques enraged with
Deafening madness. It booms
And cripples your warmth.
And the warmth vanished, empties,
Outside of you, as if you
Where a vase. Intricately
Made; broken over into
A thousand, million shards.
So then you are broken.
Then you are empty.
Your mind curls up, your heart blisters.
Everything inside and out aches.
You long to go outside.
Itís a cool spring evening,
You step through the door.
A severe storm calmed at
The ocean surface.
Hollow winds cease.
The gentle wave unfurls your
Disillusion. Warmth of the
Sun uncurls you.
The whispering ocean
Lulls you into its mouth
Once again.
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