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TITLE: My Father's Race
By
08/08/09
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Not really too much to say about this one. Could use a little a work on some of the lines and pattern flow. Suggestions anyone?

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My Fatherís Race

Sometimes Father, I can barely hold on.
I look forward to see the finish line right
Before my very eyes.
My heart palpitating inside me like a
Pandemonium.
Father, can you feel this heart raging?
Itís beating so hard; Iím running this
All for you.
Cant you see me? I begged you for so
Long to let me run in this race,
I laced on new shoes, and set this
Very pace.
I raced against me and the ticking clock.
There wasnít a moment when I didnít
Force myself to pursue it,
a dream that you gave me,
This person I am who you made me!
Face flat on the ground, the rain
is pounding, pounding down.
Father, Father I canít seam to get up.
Iíve stumbled and fell beneath my
own weight.
When did you abandon me, and why?
I thought that you loved me,
But when I cried out for you
Nobody ever came.
Peeling my face up off of the ground
I teach myself over the things
That you said, ďTrust in me always.Ē
And you told me, ďlet go.Ē
But I gripped on tighter, Father.
Closing my eyes shut, I finally let go,
And the sky around me opened up.
And now Iím running towards the
Finish line
Racing ahead.
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