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TITLE: Fallen Star
By
07/02/09
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just some more therapy...nothing over exciting. I hope that there is still some art albeit all the therapy. thanks!
Fallen Star

Watching these golden stars falling to the earth
Ive been looking up, the frozen air is chilling,
I wondered why youd fallen out of my earth.
My atmosphere feel empty,
Like space without any stars.
I know that its true some fall
In and out
And if I where to see you falling
Id run and catch you.
I wish I could say to you, come back
And fill my planet with sun, rain,
Moon and stars.
Give me back what God once gave us.
Watching these silver stars falling to earth
Ive been wondering why youd fallen out of my earth.
My ocean feels lonely,
Like bluest of waters without any fish.
I know Fallen Star

Watching these golden stars falling to the earth
Ive been looking up, the frozen air is chilling,
I wondered why youd fallen out of my earth.
My atmosphere feel empty,
Like space without any stars.
I know that its true some fall
In and out
And if I where to see you falling
Id run and catch you.
I wish I could say to you, come back
And fill my planet with sun, rain,
Moon and stars.
Give me back what God once gave us.
Watching these silver stars falling to earth
Ive been wondering why youd fallen out of my earth.
My ocean feels lonely,
Like bluest of waters without any fish.
I know that its true
Some stay forever.
And what if we were forever?
I wish I could say
Im a galaxy of planets,
Open space, moon, and stars.
I wish there were more to me that
I could offer to you.
My sky looks dull
Like air without oxygen.
You felt like a missing star in my midnight sky
Now a missing person, never to be found.
And if I where to see you falling
Id run to catch you.
My atmosphere is a little hazy
And I wonder why you had to be
My fallen star?
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