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TITLE: Speeding or The Silhouette of You (Over Me)
By
06/25/09
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This is my therapy. I needed to get some pent up emotions out. anyway, here it is. It might not make much sense in some places, but its therapy. I'm the only one who knows what every little detail is about. Tell if you get it/like it. Thanks everyone!
Speeding or the Silhouette of You (Over Me)

My silhouetted dreams
Now left to shatter,
Cant find away how to accept
All these things
That fly at me
Constantly.
I didn稚 want to have to go.
But I guess I知 always
In one forward motion.
Gotta thousand miles left to go.
I just wanted you to know
There are things beyond me and my control.
I知 just a fast car speeding
as fast as I can go.
Cant even breathe to catch,
What was mine was left to be yours;
Now long gone,
On my silhouetted dreams
Now left to shatter.
I wanted this more than life
More than open skies
Fill up with heavy rain storms.
I wanted you more than dreams
Could feel real.
Sometimes I forget,
dreams are broken more easy
than twigs. (Guess that means I知a twig.)
I guess I知 just a fast car
Speeding down this forgotten dream;
I wanted so bad.
Like you wanted me
(Wanted you.)
Picking up these broken sticks
Found my pain picking them up all by myself.
I guess im just a fast car
Speeding down the road;
Running from all these
That keep
Flying at me.
I never felt more broken
More empty without you here.
With all my (destructive)
Thoughts
Flying at me.
I guess im just a speeding car
Flying down the road,
Running from myself.
(Though I thought I was running from you.)
I tried to make myself believe in love.
The tender things you壇 always said.
Maybe now I壇 figure,
These sticks I知 forced pick up all on my own,
I壇 have to get away
From the person I once thought you were;
Like you wanted me
(Wanted you.)
I知 just manic driver
Speeding down the road,
In your silhouette of empty promises.
Gotta fly away from you now.
Gotta run away from you now.
Gotta get away from you now.
I知 just a panic driver,
Speeding down the road.
And all I知 wishing,
(missing)
Is the person you used to be
You made me
Love myself again
You even made me
Smile again.
You must致 liked my frown (even more),
Even if were upside down;
Because im just a car
Speeding down the road.
Trying to catch
My silhouetted dreams
(wanted them more than I wanted you.)
I hate saying it.
Like you wanted me.
(Wanted you.)
I dread saying it:
You gotta get away.
You gotta fly away.
You gotta run away.
You gotta get away.
Because im just a fast car
Speeding down the road;
Giving up you
Its like giving up me.
(Giving up on another dream.)
(Giving up you.)
So I知 picking up my broken sticks.
Making my silhouetted dreams
Burst through the shadows.
(the shadow of you.)
(You standing over me.)
And I知 driving faster than ever before.
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