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TITLE: Huffy AQnd tuffy
By Ken Ebright
04/14/09
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This is a story I wrote fo the challenge. could you review the grammar
Huffy and Tuffy were elevators at Ronaldson’s Department Stores. The two elevators worked side by side and talked to each other.

It was a busy shopping day at the store, because there was a half price off sale. Huffy's doors opened up on the first floor. People poured into the elevator to where there were wall to wall people.

"Ahhhhh," as Huffy huffed and puffed as the elevator went up. "Tuffy, I don't know how I am going to make it to the third floor."

"Huffy, you can make it," said Tuffy who could be compared to a body Builder.

"Oh man, thank God I made it," as Huffy was relieved to reach the third floor. "That was tough I hope most of these people get off."

At the same time Tuffy was picking up people in the basement and was going up with ease. " I have no problem going up."

"I have a few more floors to go still. I like going down verses up," said Huffy.

“How do you do it Tuffy? It is so hard for me to go up."

"I have no problem going up. I rely on Jesus to give me strength. In Philippians it says that we have the strength to face all conditions with the power of Christ Jesus. That is why my name is Tuffy. What you need to is rely on Jesus," said Tuffy.

"Jesus, can help an elevator like me?" questioned Huffy.

"Yes he can," said Tuffy.

I know that this is a silly story and elevators don't talk to each other. Tuffy was tough because he relied on Jesus. I hope that this illustrates the point that
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