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After showing mommy their schoolwork, Sally and Alley decided to play outside. It was such a beautiful day, they went walking instead. After receiving permission, they soon came to an old barn that looked haunted, but fun.
“Let’s play in the barn,” suggested Sally.
“You know we’re not allowed to play in there,” reminded Alley.
As Alley continued walking, Sally lingered.
Wondering out loud, Sally stated, “I bet there’s some rats and lizards in there.”
“Sally, you know we’re not allowed near the barn. Have you forgotten about getting lost in the woods?”
“Aren’t you just a little bit curious?” asked Sally.
As usual, Alley gave in to Sally. They walked to the barn and opened the door. As they looked in, they heard a sound. The girls looked at each other. Slowly, they walked just inside the door.
“Can you imagine playing hide and seek in here?” asked Sally. “Alley? Where are you?’
Suddenly she heard a sound behind her. As she turned around, Sally screamed. A pair of eyes were staring at her. As she screamed again, she turned and began running toward the door, bumping into Alley. Alley couldn’t help but laugh.
“Why are you laughing?” asked Sally.
“The way you ran out. You should’ve seen your expression.”
“You scared me to death!” retorted Sally.
“That wasn’t me,” replied Alley.
Suddenly, their eyes grew wide. There was something else in the barn. Alley started thinking about the incident. She decided to go back in the barn to see what was in there that scared Sally. This time they left the door open. It was dark and creepy. They slowly opened the door and walked back inside, leaving the door open. Alley sniffed around, and they walked further inside. They heard a noise. As they turned, the barn door slammed shut. They screamed. Something was coming toward them. As they started to run toward the door, something beat them and blocked the door. Everywhere the looked, they could see eyes watching them. They froze. Alley was able to make out something going up toward the ceiling. As her eyes adjusted to the dark, she could tell it was a ladder.
“Sally, com’on! The ladder!”
They scurried up the ladder into the loft.
With a little light filtering between the cracks, they were able to make out what was chasing them.
“Squirrels!” yelled Sally.
“You go across the beam while I distract them. Then we can get out through the door,” instructed Alley.
“You go across. I can outrun the squirrels better than you. You open the door.”
“Ok, but hurry.”
Sally began teasing the squirrels while Alley ran across the beam. As she reached the other side, she noticed that Sally had pulled the ladder out of reach so the squirrels couldn’t follow them.
“Good girl,” thought Alley.
As she reached the door, she yelled to Sally, “Hurry.” As Sally started to jump to the beam, she lost her balance and fell to the floor. Alley began screaming.
“Alley, Alley. wake up honey. As Alley opened her eyes, she saw her mother and heard the soft voice she always loved. Then she remembered Sally.
“Mommy, Sally’s hurt. You’ve got to help her,” she cried.
“Shh. It’s alright Alley. It’s just a bad dream.”
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