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TITLE: Lou
By Ken Ebright
06/08/10
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Please look at grammer also tell me how I could show not tell. I also after dialog don't want to always do the "said Lou" I hope you understand whay I mean.
Beep, beep, beep, engine eight, twenty-one and forty-two explosion at Fairview Church at one-eighteen Little Road," went the scanner.

"Hey Sally, get out there," screamed Lou, the editor for "The Christian Journal."

"Yes sir," said Sally a reporter, for the newspaper, as she threw he note pad in her purse. She zipped up her purse and walked over to Lou's desk to get further instructions.

Lou looked up from his computer, "I want not just a story about what happened but, I also want to do a story on how their faith sustained them. The most important thing is you need to do, is pray with people from the church after the interview. If you feel the Lord leading you to do so."

"Good thinking," said Sally as she straightened her hair then walked out.

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Sally got back and wrote her story. She e-mailed it to Lou and went over to his desk as he looked at it.

"Hmmm, you did a good job," as Lou read through the story.

Sally was stood at Lou's desk and gave a big smile, "Thank you."

Ed moved his mouse, "The part about the fireman was really interesting. Especially how he accepted the Lord because of the pastor's faith."

Sally put her hand on her chin as if she was in thought, "I think my praying with the pastor, and a few of the members was one of the things that made the difference."

"Oh really," as Lou looked up from his computer at Sally.

"I noticed fireman's eye's light up when asked everyone to get into a group to pray. Your suggestion you made caused someone to find the Lord. It was the Christian witness that done it."

"Praise the Lord!" Said Lou.

Lou opened his Bible that was by his keyboard "I want to add the verse from Hebrews where is says that you will never leave me or forsake me, if you don't mind."

Sally smiled, "Wow that would be great."

It ended being such a good story that Sally won an award with the Christian newspaper organization.
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