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TITLE: A Trilogy: Jesus, Daniel and me
By Caleb Cheong
11/22/13
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To whoever cares to read and kind enough to comment on it; no personal agenda; I desire to glorify Him as a voice in writing.
A Trilogy: Jesus, Daniel and me

Like a goldfish bowl, people scrutinize Jesus with persistence

“Yes, He hangs out with hungry hooligans and charlatans!”

Yet multitudes flock to Him for mighty miracles and magnificent sermons.

Pilate declares his innocence but the religious demand His crucifixion.

His Resurrection has robustly resolved all doubts and disillusion

Presenting Himself to despairing disciples, seen by several others

“I’m going back to the Father, but I’ll come again!”ť He utters



Like a goldfish bowl, Babylonians peer at Daniel like a pseudo sage

Daniel and his friends decline the king’s food with candid courage

They refuse to bow down to the king’s image

Jealous people say he is a non-conformist

Daniel prays so boldly that he becomes noticed

King Darius went to the lions’ den to enquire

Daniel is indeed the man desired for his empire



Like a goldfish bowl, my toddler daughter will define my place

When I hide in bed to pray, she’ll pull my hands and lift up my face

In the washroom, she’ll hound me later in the day

She’ll ask, “Daddy, are you there? Answer me!”ť

Sliding the door to check if I’m still there

Just as I open the house door to take a breather

Inevitably, she’ll ask, “Daddy, where will you wander?”



Like a goldfish bowl, people observe Jesus, Daniel and me

Some do it out of a sense of innate insecurity

While others do it out of a sense of joyless jealousy

But my daughter does it out of her childlike curiosity

Life in the goldfish bowl and life in Heaven-- a dichotomy

Like an open book we strive to live a Christ-centered life

More importantly, our names are found in the Book of Life
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