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TITLE: The Curse
By Felisa Walton
05/07/11
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Curses follow you
"The Curse"


"Hazel why don't you just go now, I don't want to hear this stuff," Jazz responded when he walked in door. Hazel was on the sofa just waiting for him. She had already consumed two pints of gin and she was just waiting to jump down his throat.

"Where the hell have you been? It is 3:00 a.m.," she chided. Oh”, you were out with one of your many women. I am tired of you coming in all hours of the morning. I have been here alone with the children all day and night.

Dana tried to sleep but because of all the commotion going on between her parents it was hard. Dana often wondered why her mother always would start with him especially late at night when we were trying to sleep.

Her other siblings were in bed and she was stunned that all she ever heard was snoring from them when arguing and fighting was going on in their home.

She was not stupid even though she was the third child out the four children. She knew they were pretending to be asleep because that did not want to deal with the problem that we all knew regarding our mother. Dana couldn’t really understand because she was young but it apparent her mother drank a lot.


After about a full hour of arguing, the fighting started, Dana heard a loud noise. She knew then that her father had slapped her mother. Dana jumped from her bed, running and crying at the same time to the living room.

Dana placed her small frame in between them saying; "You all need to stop. Momma, go to bed please! Hazel continued arguing even as the blood dripped from her mouth.

“Dana go back to bed”, Jazz said. How can you expect me to sleep after all this stuff? She did what her father told her. To spite what had just happened, she respected her father and when he spoke she listened.

Lying in her bed, tears continued to fall from her eyes. She wondered what the next day would bring for her and her siblings. She knew from previous experiences that it would only continue.

This lasted for most of Dana’s childhood; she does not remember having a real relationship with her mother. Maybe it was the drinking; but she felt unloved and she resented her mother for always causing disruptions in their home.

Those memories followed Dana throughout her relationships with her siblings, men and her daughter. Because it was hard for her understand why her mother drank so much which lead to un resolved issues

Dana followed the curse, not with drinking but with substances abuse it her efforts to deal her own pain.

Dana now has a daughter and their relationship has been strained due to her ineffective way of handling unresolved issues. She prays to God that the curse does not continue.
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