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I don’t know about you but I totally love rollercoasters. A LOT. Even when they scare me to death or make me a little sick. I haven’t gone on any new ones for awhile (hope I can soon) but I did read a great book about them by Robert Coker that was totally awesome. This song is about how life can be like a wild rollercoaster that's out of control but God is there for us. Please tell me what you think and how I can improve! Thanks.
Update: This new version of the song (with actual rhymes!) is about enjoying the short life God has given you in spite of how crazy it can be.
You’re clanking up slowly to the top of the hill
Why did they have to build this so tall?
You know that it’s just a matter of time
Before you’re in a lofty freefall
Your heart is beating fast and you close your eyes
As you fear what’s coming just up ahead
How long will it last? How will you survive?
You’d rather be anywhere else instead
A wiiiiild ro-ller-coa-ster called life,
no way to jump out or back down
Soaring up… rushing down… zooming around and around
Aaaaaah! Feels like there’s no control
As your world turns upside-down
But just hold on tight and know that you’ll be fine
The harness will hold you in.
Soon you’re falling like a rock with your gut in your chest
And moving faster than a runaway train
With all the ups and downs that’s you’re going through
Your hopefulness is hard to maintain
But you gotta let go if you want to be free
And know how it feels to fly
You should open your eyes so you can take in the view
And lift your hands up to the sky!
Different last part: The track won’t let you down.
What a wild ride this life can be
When it’s moving at top ve-lo-ci-ty
All the surprising twists and the sickening turns
The screams and the cheers as your stomach churns
But in spite of all the dizziness and mad G-force
The Builder knows how to keep you staying right on course
You only get one go on this crazy ride
So love it as you speed towards the other side
Last part: You’ll make it safely to the end.
Yeah, He’ll bring us safely to the end.
*electric guitar screech like a coaster stopping*
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