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Woah, look whoís back from the dead! Hey everyone! Whatís new? Iíve been crazy busy for quite a couple years with Master's Commission but now that I have more time I felt I should write something already. Hope you're not disappointed that it's another parody.
After I stumbled into the unexpectedly good show MLP:FiM in 2012 I also discovered the creative fandom behind it with itís many inspired fan-made videos and songs. When I found this song and listened to it I think my first reaction was queasiness in my stomach. I wonít say specifically what the song is about, but only that it involves a character living in deep regret for a nightmare of a job he does every day. However dark the song is, and however unpleasant I felt, it was so catchy and inspiring that I simply couldnít stop listening to it. Eventually inspiration struck and this parody is the result. Both songs are about people who do monstrous things and want redemption. You can listen to the original at the bottom. (Iíd also encourage you to watch the show but I know that might be a little harder to do. Lol) Thanks!
I'll warn readers that this is the darkest thing I've ever written but not dark to excess. It's only so dark so that the light will look that much brighter.
Got any suggestions for how to make this sound better? Thanks for reading! Parodies are hard!
How did I get to this point?
All that I wanted was a good family
But in exchange I had to trade away my soul
Now just a shell of myself
Iíve lost all that I ever hoped I could be
And all the hurt and lies have begun to take their toll
Iíve pulled the trigger
Lived the lies the devil said
Painted my hands green while painting floors with red
Drowning in madness
From the twisted life Iíve led
God, Iím so unclean. Please revive me from the dead!
I hear the voices cry in my sleep
See the shadows inside me creep
Iíd give it all up to make it all stop!
No way that it could all last
Too much bloodshed on my hands to wash away
Hear the sound of the sirens blareÖ shouting and bullet shells fill the air
I run but not fast enough
In a moment Iím down and theyíre ready to make me pay
Locked up forever, like the wild creature that I am
(New second half of chorus)
Whoís that approaching
With a book within his hand?
His words revive me, I begin to understand
Now Iím ready to let go
And take the new life God has planned
Light shines within me, and Iíve got the strength to stand!
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