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Our Faith is not a Romance Novel
by vaughn ohlman
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Let me tell a story to all of you that like romance novels...

(Ok. We love stories. Tell a good one.)

Once upon a time there was a girl...

(Ooooh, good. We like it already. All good books start with a girl... well, unless they start with a boy...)

Now, this girl had a father...

(Aaah... yes. Father vs girl. Grab some hot chocolate, this is going to be a good story.)

The father had sought, and he found someone that He wanted the girl to marry ...

(Yes! And he was really a bad guy, which everyone knew but the father. How is the girl going to convince her father that the guy is bad? Or will they run away, and the father only be convinced later?...)

... and the man was wonderful...

(Well, he may have *seemed* wonderful, but of course we will find out more later.)

However the girl rejected her fathers choice...

(Of course. What an old fashioned and stupid father to try to pick a spouse for his daughter?)

... and instead ran off and became a prostitute.

(Yo. Hold on. This is getting a bit edgy. Sure, some of the more modern novels can include this kind of thing, but this is a Christian site, and we expected something more, something better. What kind of book are you writing here?)

Her father found her laying naked and bloody in a field, abandoned by but still attracted to her many lovers.

(This is going *way* too far. This is getting practically X-rated. And the plot line is all torn to shreds. How is this girl going to meet and find someone better than her fathers pick, if she has proven herself to be such a moral leper, and if he keeps acting in this way?)

He took her home, and, against her will, convinced her to be betrothed to the man of his choice.

(This is a little better. We like the word 'betrothed', it gives the story an old fashioned flavor. And that he convinced her against her will. Poor girl. We can't wait to find out how she gets out of this betrothal.)

Once her will was overthrown by her fathers love, her betrothed began washing her with his words, convincing her of his love for her...

(Oh, sure, lots of words to cover up his basic nastiness. Good try dude, that girl will find you out in the end.)

... and she found out that he himself had taken on himself the punishment for her prostitutions.

(He had done what? This good-on-the surface but actually horrible guy had taken on her punishment? This guy that her father picked for her?)

Guided by his word, she came, over the months, to trust in him more and more, and to be obedient to everything he said.

(This is really bad. It is getting tense. When is she going to wake up and see what this guy is about?)

One day, as a complete surprise, he came and took her to his fathers house, where they consummated their marriage...

(No. Stop. Against the rules. The law says that a romance novel must have the girl wake up *before* they actually, ummm, 'consummate', the relationship. You blew it here dude.)

... and lived happily ever after. Forever and ever in His Fathers house.

To God be be the glory, our faith is not a romance novel.

If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be! TRUST JESUS NOW

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Don Beers 14 Oct 2008
I understand the point you were trying to make here and for the most part, from what I was able to glean from this, I just might agree with you premise of the whole article. However, since this reads more like an outline than an article, me, the reader, has been left to formulate some kind of ideas (assume) I know what you mean...okay, what do I mean? What I mean is that this piece does a lot more "telling" than it does "showing." Just because some of us may be able to read "between the lines" and perhaps see what you are saying here; it doesn't come without a struggle. Personally, I don't mind the mental gymnastics of reading, but most of your readers do. Just a thought. Still, there is so much more you could have said, I think you got a little anxious when this idea came to mind to write and you rushed to do it...is that about right?


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