I really enjoyed the second and third stanzas where you compare yourself to a sheep and to coffee. It is so true that without our light, we are forever lost in darkness. Wonderful message and a wonderful poem. :)
I was reading along and enjoying your poem - feeling like I would only have positive comments to say. However, the 3rd & 4th stanzas from the bottom I felt had minor flow issues. There is some rephrasing that could fix it and still keep the same message - but it's your beautiful poem and I won't attempt to rewrite it for you. Very enjoyable, thank you. Blessings & Success, ~DCJones
