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Guilty
by Kristen Hester
03/20/08
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Mini Challenge Instructions:
1. Write two ultra-short stories (no more than 75 words each)
2. They should be completely different in mood, tone, genre
3. Each should BEGIN with this sentence:

Megan stared at the stain, horrified.


Masterpiece

Megan stared at the stain, horrified. The mark only grew as she rubbed it with her chubby hand. She shouldn’t have been drawing on Granny’s beautiful lace tablecloth.

Megan heard her Granny approach. There was no hiding now.

“I ruined your tablecloth,” Megan confessed with tears.

Granny reached for the picture. “If I can have this masterpiece, it will more than pay for a hundred tablecloths,” Granny said with a smile and a hug.

Guilty

Megan stared at the stain, horrified. She was at her son’s school for a sting operation. Someone had been stealing money, so she’d set a trap. Before arriving, the police officer in her had been eager to learn the identity of the thief.

Now, as she shone the florescent light on her son’s hands, she was shocked that they were marked, indicating his guilt.

In one moment, Megan transformed from professional detective to anguished mother.




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Elizabeth Schick 23 Apr 2008
Awesome job! I love both of them!
Holly Westefeld 22 Mar 2008
Both are vivid, and elicit an emotional reaction.
Sally Hanan 22 Mar 2008
I love the granny in the first one and you packed lots into the second one. I think the first one was better because it was one moment in time and you got some lovely visuals in, whereas in the second one you had to put more detail so that we knew where you were going with it, which left less room for visuals.
Lyn Churchyard 21 Mar 2008
Both so well written, and both so different yet the same topic. Super job Kristen!
Marita Vandertogt 21 Mar 2008
I love Masterpiece... what an excellent response from the grandmother. And great ending on the sting operation!
Mo 21 Mar 2008
I felt the girl's fear & the grandmother's love in the 1st, & the mom's anguish in the 2nd. Great!
Karen Wilber  21 Mar 2008
The first one is precious, but I really like the second story. What a surprise--lots of detail, action, suspense, and a twist all packed into 75 words. How'd you DO that? :-D
Jan Ackerson  20 Mar 2008
Awww, Kristen, I love little Megan's chubby hands! And the other one really puts a gasp in one's throat--I can't imagine what that'd feel like. Thanks for these great mini-stories!
Betty Castleberry 20 Mar 2008
You did it again, Kristen. These are SO good. Kudos!
Chely Roach 20 Mar 2008
These are awesome. I too, love the 'chubby hands'. Awwwww. And the second one tells so much with so few words...loved them.
jodie banner 20 Mar 2008
Wow, you told so much in so few words. I feel for the mother.
Loren T. Lowery 20 Mar 2008
Two more great entries. I liked the granny in the first. Reminds me a bit of my own.
Tim Pickl 20 Mar 2008
Two homeruns here!
Joanney Uthe 20 Mar 2008
Your writing leaves me speechless. These are outstanding. Wow!




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