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It Sure Looked Good
by Holly Westefeld 
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It Sure Looked Good

It sure looked good, when Eve first saw the fruit,
And tasted it; by serpent was beguiled.
She never meant creation to pollute
With sin and death, but Satan slyly smiled.

It sure looked good, when Lot selected land;
Near Sodom and Gomorrah he remained,
But things did not work out as he had planned,
When fire and brimstone on the cities rained.

It sure looked good, the lentil stew, that day,
When Esau came in tired from the kill;
So good, his birthright he would trade away.
Too high a price he paid to eat his fill.

It sure looked good, to one strong Nazirite,
Enamored of a heathen Philistine,
To share his secret strength; It cost his sight,
And strength, and then his life, revenge to glean.

It sure looked good, to God's anointed king,
To spy upon Bathsheba's evening bath.
Consumed by lust, which led to murdering,
The prophet, Nathan, soon pronounced God's wrath.

It sure looked good, the offer Satan made,
To bow, and rule the kingdoms of the earth,
But Jesus knew 'twas counterfeit, and bade
Him to depart. The offer had no worth.

It sure looked good, in Jesus' parable,
A farmer, building bigger barns, desired.
To store his goods did not seem terrible,
But on that night his life would be required.

It sure looked good, when freedom from their cell
Was offered by an earthquake in the night,
But Paul and Silas would the gospel tell.
The jailer's life and soul was their delight.

It sure looked good, his dream of destiny,
The power and the worship, his desire,
Which drove him on to worthless mutiny.
Oh reign he will, in never-ending fire.

If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be! TRUST JESUS NOW

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Tim Pickl 18 Feb 2008
Wow--what a Bible Study! Masterfully you captured the "All that glitters is not gold" topic. I can hear the voice in your poem -- it sounds Irish! I encourage you to get it recorded, perhaps complete with music and sound effects!
Dee Yoder  06 Feb 2008
Oooh! Satan's deception to himself is the ultimate "all that glitters is not gold" warning for humanity. Excellent poetry, Holly. Love this.
Gerald Shuler  06 Feb 2008
It sure looked good, read good, was good. Sorry it didn't make the challenge. My entry certainly would submit to yours taking the ribbon.
Joy Faire Stewart 06 Feb 2008
Oh, this is wonderful, I love it. I plan to read it to my prayer group.
Jan Ackerson  06 Feb 2008
Very good, Holly! I really like the buildup to the awesome last stanza, and especially the last line. Excellent!
Sara Harricharan  06 Feb 2008
Oooh! I liked this! It's very good-and your title definitely fits the piece! ^_^
Pat Guy  06 Feb 2008
Oh wow! This IS good! That last stanza is the kicker. I can only echo what every one else sees in this work. Wow!
william price 06 Feb 2008
Excellent job. I wish I knew more about poetry to comment more, but very, very good. God bless.
K. J. Cash 01 Feb 2008
I find myself looking for your name, because I enjoy reading your entries. I'm sorry it didn't make the cut off, but I'm glad we can enjoy the work anyway. You did a great job varying the rhyming patterns in your work. Repeating rhymes should never be accepted. I never have the heart to point that out when it's a problem :0)
Hanne Moon  31 Jan 2008
This was very well-written and I'm sorry you didn't get it in the challenge this week...it would have been a winner!!
Julie Ruspoli 31 Jan 2008
What a wonderful poem. It is enjoyable to read. I love the rythm. Such a great message. Keep writing for Him!
LauraLee Shaw 31 Jan 2008
Wow, this is really good!!!! Very creative, perfectly on the topic, packed with the punch of a great message.... You know what, you're glittery gold piece is an absolute treasure offering to the Lord. He inspired it, and now He is receiving it from you. List it as a free reprint, and watch it sparkle all over...


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