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Mini Challenge I Lilla
by Nancy McHough
12/13/07
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Lilla sat in a doorway on the side of St. Zita’s shivering. An hour earlier she had been turned down at the shelter; a city ordinance imposed shelter maximums; she along with twenty others had the door closed on them. It was a three block walk to Zita’s; the spitting snow combined with mist to create a mush along the street thus quickly filling her toeless shoes with water.

She gathered up her belongings around her and tried to warm her feet with her coat. She had a rusted paperclip for a button. Cars began to pull up and let off passengers. Christmas eve Mass.

“You can’t stay here.” A voice woke Lilla.

She was used to admonishment and expected to have her body pushed into the street. She tried to reach for her bag.

“I have your bag, come with me, I have a cot you can use tonight.”

Lilla followed. Why argue with warmth. Inside the door was a small storage room with a cot set up. Lilly sat down on the cot and looked for the man. He wasn’t there. “Oh, well, nice of him.”

She slept soundly. The next morning she awoke and stepped outside of the room, the door closed behind her. She sat down on the curb and rubbed her face. “Oh, my bag”. She turned to go back to the room, but there was no door.

“Lilla? Is that you?” Her sister embraced her. “I looked everywhere for you.”


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Verna Cole Mitchell  18 Dec 2007
The descriptions were so good that I wanted to get some warm slippers on.
Beth LaBuff  17 Dec 2007
WHO is this "woman" that writes all these stories? :) Yes, she IS good. Is there really a St. Zita? I love the ending.
Janice Cartwright 16 Dec 2007
I like the way the author insinuated grace to contrast with Lilla's street-worn attitude.
Marita Vandertogt 16 Dec 2007
Wow - this is GOOD!!
Karen Wilber 16 Dec 2007
Cool. I like the air of mystery and the ending.
dub W 14 Dec 2007
Pretty good work for a hack reporter.




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