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Mini Challenge I The Box
by dub W
12/13/07
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Nan found the note attached with a paperclip to her typing stand. “Meet me at Coops, midnight.” She ripped the little yellow sticker from the metal paper holder. “It’s Manny. I didn’t even know he was in town.”

She closed down her PC, waved at Lee, and rushed to the elevator; then held it open with her shoe while she adjusted her briefcase shoulder belt. “Sheesh, it’s ten till, I'll never make it.”

She flew out the employee entrance and jumped in her little Civic. Lucky for me, Christmas eve and little traffic. She raced through the streets of the French
Quarter until she came to Decatur Street. A parade of Christmas tourists crossed the street in front of her. “They ought to be home with loved ones, I guess some people simply don’t understand Jesus’ birth.”

She pulled in the French Market parking lot – it was nearly empty. “Good.” There was a crisp mist falling when she got out of the car. She wrapped her jacket tightly around her body, crossed the street, and rushed into the all night bar. Manny was seated at a table reading the paper.

“Manny!” She screamed loud enough a dozen customers turned on their bar stools. “What are you doing here?”

He grinned in a way Nan knew there was something ornery afoot.

“Okay. Spill it.”

Manny opened his jacket and produced a small black box. He opened the lid. "Merry Christmas."

Outside of the restaurant a gentle snow began to fall.


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CeCe Lane 19 Dec 2007
Ack! You can't stop there. What happens next? I really liked this one.
Verna Cole Mitchell  18 Dec 2007
I like how you made us see your characters. Who knew you'd have such a deft touch with romance. I enjoyed it.
Beth LaBuff  17 Dec 2007
Sweet definitely describes this! ...and snow in the French Quarter, I'd imagine there were several "blue moon" events taking place in this story. This was a lot of fun to read.
Janice Cartwright 16 Dec 2007
Among other things to like about your story, in two small words, 'crisp mist' said so much.
Marita Vandertogt 16 Dec 2007
This is sweet - a lot of action in a small bundle of words complete with a happy ending. And it does read like a mini movie clip. Nice!
Karen Wilber 16 Dec 2007
This is excellent - so much packed into 250 words. I like all the fast paced action - then the final calm sentence about the snow falling.
Tim Pickl 14 Dec 2007
Short, warm, sweet....inspiring! it reads like a Christmas movie! Perhaps someday we'll see it played out on the Hallmark Channel. Thanks Dub W for sharing and inspiring us!




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