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A Chance on Love
by Kristen Hester
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AUTHOR’S NOTE: The following is an entry for a mini-challenge. The fictional short story was required to contain the following in 500 words:
1. The color purple;
2. A piece of fruit (but the fruit is not to be the purple item);
3. A letter (hmmm ... but what kind of letter? You decide);
4. A D & M conversation (that's "deep and meaningful," for the un-hip among us) between two people. (But that D & M conversation is not part of the letter); and
5. A twist at the end.


It was Saturday night and I was at Blockbuster looking for a video that I would watch alone. As I debated between Beaches and The Color Purple I spotted a handsome man on the adventure aisle. My first instinct was to hide in the romance section and stare from a distance. Then I remembered a recent conversation with my sister.

“You’ll always be alone if you don’t start taking chances,” she said.

“I’ll meet the right person when the time is right,” I responded.

“There will never be a right time if you don’t quit hiding behind your computer.”

“I’m not hiding. I’m a writer. It’s my job. Remember?”

“Whatever. I have the perfect person for you. A friend of Rick’s. Let me introduce you.”

“No thanks.”

“You’ve got to take a chance.”

Motivated by her words I made my way over to his aisle for a closer inspection. He wasn’t wearing a wedding ring. However, my reflection in the glass window reminded me that I had no make-up on and was wearing baggy sweats and a faded t-shirt - - not the attire for a positive first impression. I sadly watched the potential man of my dreams pay for his rental and walk out the door.

When I noticed a Christian symbol on the bumper of his truck, I was no longer willing to let him just drive out of my life. I grabbed a pen from my purse and recorded the letters and numbers from his license plate on my hand.

I returned home and called my brother-in-law, Rick, who was a cop. I begged and offered free babysitting until he agreed to run a trace to identity my mystery man.

Satisfied that I’d taken a chance, I settled down to watch my movie. Watching calories, I snacked on sliced apple instead of my usual buttered popcorn. After all, I might be meeting the man of my dreams soon.

I was surprised when Rick called. “I’ve got some bad news,” he began. “That F-150 truck was reported stolen two weeks ago. It’s been linked to several burglaries. I’m on my way to your house to fill out a report and get a description of the driver.” So much for taking chances.

I was still feeling disappointed when my doorbell rang. I opened the door and was shocked to find the man from Blockbuster standing in front of me. I jumped in fear and tripped and fell as I turned to run.

Before I could get back up an apologetic Rick appeared from behind a tree. “It’s okay,” Rick said quickly. “The tags you gave me belonged to my friend that your sister had wanted you to meet. I couldn’t resist playing a joke on you.”

I grabbed my throbbing ankle and tried to compute what was happening.

“He’s not a criminal,” Rick continued. “He’s a doctor.”

Dr. Blockbuster kneeled down and examined my ankle. I swooned at his touch as he said, “It’s just a twist.”

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harvestgal Ndaguba 21 Jun 2009
Wow, It's an adventure. It keeps you wondering what will happen next. I enjoyed it and loved the twist at the end.
Justus Ondieki 22 Feb 2008
Hi Kristen, wow,what a motivating story!I loved the way things went in this story.Sometimes it's good to take chances.Keep up with this spirit.Love sent, Justus
LauraLee Shaw 09 Nov 2007
I'm so glad I stumbled on this one. It is brilliant and clever and entertaining and all those gripping adjectives.
Mo 02 Oct 2007
Wow! This is GREAT!
darlene hight 02 Oct 2007
I love this! How much fun was that?
Linda Germain  02 Oct 2007
It doesn't get any better than this. :0) Adorable, and so satisfying~
Beth LaBuff  01 Oct 2007
Sweet, sweet, and SWEET... Did I mention this is sweet (on multiple levels). I love this! ...especially the "DR. Blockbuster". You are amazing!
dub W 01 Oct 2007
Oh, this is good. Though I figured the twist from the beginning, the intrigue kept me glued. Well done.
Teri Wilson 01 Oct 2007
Kristin, This is pure genius. I adored it! Blessings, Teri
Deborah Porter  01 Oct 2007
Adorable! Kristen, thanks for the smile, the swoon, and the twist a the end. :-) Love, Deb
Marita Vandertogt 30 Sep 2007
A double twist at the end - how clever is that! A fun read...really enjoyed it.
Verna Cole Mitchell  30 Sep 2007
One of my favorites...You haven't lost your touch, regardless of the assignment.
Emily Blakely 29 Sep 2007
What a delight. Great ending!
Marilyn Schnepp  29 Sep 2007
Very, very interesting, and also very intriguing - definitely a "Page Turner" even at 500 words! Great Job!
Janice Cartwright 29 Sep 2007
whoo-hoo Kristen. Way to GO girl. Loved it@
Jan Ackerson  29 Sep 2007
Wow, Kristen--twists upon twists! I love little romances like this, and you've done marvelously.


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