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Ideas 5 at 50
by Nancy McHough
09/24/07
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#1

The hands of the clock pointed straight up. Midnight in the Cresent City.

"Let's blow this pop stand." Sheryl held the elevator door.

I scanned the office and stepped into the elevator car. "I think the city's safe."

"It's in God's hands."

"Right on sister." (45)


#2

The nurse had a worried look.

I stroked the older woman's gray hair. "Hey, Christy," I whispered.

"Any word?" Pastor Bob stuck his head in the door.

"She's going home Bob."

He stepped into the room. "Jesus is waiting." (39)


#3

Barking dogs always woke me.

I picked up the phone and dialed Manny, my fiance.

His caller ID gave me away. "Nan, do you know what time it is?"

"Yeah, couldn't sleep. Could we do a telephone prayer?"

Manny chuckled, "better than counting sheep." (44)


#4

Police officers strung yellow tape around the accident scene.

The Times reporter nudged me. "What happened?"

"He jigged when he shoulda jagged."

I went back to the office and wrote my story. It lacked color, it lacked feeling, it lacked compassion. "Lord cure my writing." (45)


#5

Katrina continues, even today. When it rains the streets flood. Of course the streets have always flooded. I pray that my little car can ford the puddles. "I'm selfish Lord, too many in my city have no shelter from the rain. Forgive me Lord." (44)


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Seema Bagai  26 Sep 2007
Liked all of them.
Betty Castleberry 25 Sep 2007
As I read these, I kept thinking "Gum shoe." That's a compliment. Love number 3 especially. Good work.
Pat Guy  25 Sep 2007
#3,4,5 my fav.s - but they are all packed tight with everything!
Janice Cartwright  25 Sep 2007
All excellent but #4 shone.
Allison Egley  25 Sep 2007
These are really good. The last one was my favorite.
Jan Ackerson  24 Sep 2007
I like your MC's voice, Dub! #4 appealed to me the most, but these were all fun--kinda hard-boiled, but tender at the same time.
Laurie Walker 24 Sep 2007
Your last one really got me thinking (and that's saying something on a lovely Monday morning...). How many times do our own personal disasters continue to "flood when it rains"?
Joanne Sher  24 Sep 2007
I'm also a fan of you (and your "creator" :D ). These are all fun - but I'm partial to #3. Good stuff.
Mo 24 Sep 2007
I like the last 3 best.




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