Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Join Faith
Writers
Forum
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

Get Our Daily Devotional             Win A Publishing Package             Detailed Navigation

The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!



 
Short Stories PLEASE ENCOURAGE THE AUTHOR BY COMMENTING

  LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE   SEND A PRIVATE MESSAGE
  HIRE THIS WRITER
REPORT ARTICLE

 TRACK THIS AUTHOR ADD TO MY FAVORITES
corner
What's New
 
corner
 
African DeLight
by Douglas Sowers
09/23/07
Free to Share
Author requests article critique


  Mail
 





Fire’s crackling mixed with screams and shots. Breezes blew choking smoke over Irungu. While awaiting the secretive blanket of night and desperately fighting a cough, another hider succumbed. Footsteps responded stimulating someone’s panicky flight. A bullet screamed death. Powerful ancient dreams shatter another night. Praise God for saving me.

Ali opened his grimy eyes, seeing Isa still slumbering. The rusty trash bin disgorged Ali. Planning the day’s hustles, he discovered malaria had destroyed Musa. Shrugging, he practiced appearing deformed while Isa woke. Would his ten year old struggle end like Musa? Could Muslims take the missionary’s offer of schooling?

Wambui, glancing furtively, stuffed the stale loaf into her kanga. Bitterly mourning losing her malnourished family, she stubbornly ignored those sufferers who mercilessly denied her children’s pleas. Along with a baby’s cry, she hears, “Whoever gives a cup of water …” Weeping, she gathers the infant off the deceased mother.

Pastor Gitanga closed the rickety door. By fasting this week, he could purchase a mosquito net, saving the rest of the children. Gitanga would respond to his tummy’s screaming by praising God for the future joy lighting the family’s eyes. God lovingly replaced enough missed meals that he remained healthy.

George unloaded solar ovens while giraffes strolled through Mr Irungu’s garden. Four of the elders on the list had qualified for micro-businesses. All distributed tracts to customers. Praise God, finally he was ending poverty, growing congregations, and planting churches. Dead methods were eliminated but the mission board threatened firing him.


If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be! TRUST JESUS NOW

Read more articles by Douglas Sowers or search for articles on the same topic or others.


Read More - Free Reprints, Main Site Articles, Most Read Articles or highly acclaimed Challenge Articles. Read Great New Release Christian Books for FREE in our Free Reads for Reviews Program. Christian writers can JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and help spread the Gospel.


The opinions expressed by authors do not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.

Hire a Christian Writer, Christian Writer Wanted, Christian Writer Needed, Christian Content Needed
Find a Christian Editor, Hire a Christian Editor, Christian Editor, Find a Christian Writer
 
corner
Corner
This article has been read 717 times     < Previous | Next >


Member Comments
Member Date
darlene hight 27 Sep 2007
very descriptive writing. Thanks for the view Darlene
Seema Bagai  27 Sep 2007
Intense, with emotion packed into a few words.
Linda Roth 26 Sep 2007
Doug, I can imagine you writing children's missionary stories! I wonder if you have done so.
Tammy Johnson 26 Sep 2007
EVERY word counted and it all flowed so well. Hard to believe they were only 50 words or less - they packed soooo much of a story!
Janice Cartwright 25 Sep 2007
Just amazing. All five involved me totally.
Allison Egley  25 Sep 2007
Oh wow. These are so intense! You really crammed a lot into 50 words. I think the last one is my favorite.
dub W 24 Sep 2007
Wow, lots of description...put it all together into a manuscript.
Pat Guy  24 Sep 2007
Wow is right! What an emotional ride - awesome. Loved them all. Especially the mother one.
Laurie Walker 24 Sep 2007
MY GOODNESS you packed a lot of vividness into 50 words! Well done doesn't seem praise enough.
Joanne Sher  24 Sep 2007
Excellent descriptions - and YES, I WAS transported. Third if my favorite.
Betty Castleberry 24 Sep 2007
These are excellent. You said so much in just a few words. I can't pick a favorite.
Verna Cole Mitchell  24 Sep 2007
These shortsnaps with the vivid descriptions bring the mission field very close. You mastered this challenge.
Mo 24 Sep 2007
Yes, certainly a very vivid peak into another life.




TRUST JESUS TODAY









Free Audio Bible
500 Plus Languages
Faith Comes By Hearing.com